Notes About The Poem

I wrote a series of these all from the same piece of text.Quite an interesting exercise.

You can try making an Erasures poem yourself from lots of different source texts here:

http://www.erasures.wavepoetry.com/sources.php

Anxiety

The many faces scattered here-
the sense of misery had 
swollen, not unexpectedly.  Sound
“louder,” suddenly
at the end, dreadful movements
then till the end.
The clear red-hot,  mass of fire
blue, full of discomfiture-
forgotten for the almost
 unrecognizable  fear.

Pieces, trembling limbs,
burning eyes, feeling faint,
fumbled and slurred.
The thumping began again,
  set-off, hoping to be able
to discover the secret at last.

Too miserable, and  in a way
astonished.

The air, the day.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018

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February 26, 2018 at 4:06 AM
Looks like an interesting form and one you have mastered, I may give it a try.. Thank you for introducing it...
Delaney Avatar
February 26, 2018 at 6:49 AM
Thanks Si: I will look forward to seeing your playing. SuZ
Michael Avatar
February 25, 2018 at 4:58 PM
I can't imagine...God bless those who suffer go through that...Well written...I was feeling it... All the best
Delaney Avatar
February 26, 2018 at 6:56 AM
Hi Michael: yes I agree it can be a terrible thing. Some people have anxiety attacks and say they weren’t feeling anxious. It was interesting to play with this text and pull three completely different poems from the same words. SuZ
Pandit Avatar
February 25, 2018 at 4:36 PM
You captured the anxiety well in your poem, Suzanne. The misery, fear, trembling, faint all come together to make your point.
Delaney Avatar
February 26, 2018 at 6:59 AM
Hello dear Vijay: Glad you stopped over. I am attempting to kickstart my Muse. Spring has come early here.
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