A Rattling Rhyme

The Baby Creep

Here in my Pampers. They took off my bib. Then they turned off the light, laid me here in my crib, yet I still see some light from the sun sunken low, but because I’m a toddler, to bed I must go? Well, I WON’T go to sleep ‘cause I just want to play! And I’m NOT a dumb blanket that just wants to lay in this crib! Should I cry? Should I NOT make a sound when I hear in the house they are moving around? I could cry. I could whimper or maybe I’ll scream, make them think I feel bad or I had a bad dream. What to do… what to do? Now my rattle I see. It will have to make do! Weren’t they nice leaving THAT there for me? So I pick up the rattle, I shake and I roll. I will shake that thing silly. Let THAT be my goal, ‘cause it’s stupid to sleep when there’s light still outside, so I’ll just be a creep, cause I’ll shake up a storm till they hear all my clatter and come to my room to see what is the matter. I’ll lay here and rattle. I’ll rattle, and though it’s till dawn, I’ll be rattling and rattling and rattling on!

Aug. 20, 2018 hopefully in the popular style of  Nina Parmenter
(I actually gave my parents quite the grief as a baby since I would not sleep till midnight, same as today!)
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Watt Avatar
August 1, 2020 at 8:50 PM
Such a perfect winner for Nina's Rattling Rhyme contest in 2018! You personified a baby so well, and you took the contest literally by rhyming about a rattle! Cute and clever and wonderful rhythm. Congrats on this long ago win, Andrea!
Arowolo Avatar
August 31, 2018 at 10:56 AM
Wonderful piece,Andrea...Very creative with this rattling style of a rhyme form...This is classic and beautiful.I envy your skills,great poet..Keep it going,pal...and Congrats on well deserved 1st place...
Gentry Avatar
August 30, 2018 at 1:22 PM
Congratulations on your #1 win. Delightful, creative, and well-written. Enjoyed.
Brewer Avatar
August 29, 2018 at 4:02 PM
You got into the mind of a terrible toddler in a direct and entertaining way. Well done Andrea.
Wigley Avatar
August 29, 2018 at 6:31 AM
Excellent, Andrea, a worthy win. Now, time for your bottle :) . Viv x
Canerdy Avatar
August 28, 2018 at 6:34 PM
CONGRATULATIONS on your well-deserved win! GOOD ONE!! Janice
Marcum Wong Avatar
August 28, 2018 at 6:20 PM
You did exactly as the contest called for Andrea. I just couldn't seem to do that. I loved your theme being about the baby! Congratulations on your deserving First Place win! : ) xxoo
Wolf Avatar
August 28, 2018 at 5:19 PM
You certainly deserve first prize, Andrea, for the rattle in this rhyme. Brilliantly conceived and executed. Kudos. ~ Gershon
Rowe Avatar
August 28, 2018 at 5:09 PM
This a very deserved winner. The words really do just rush forward like a baby having a small tantrum. Loved it.
Allison Avatar
August 28, 2018 at 4:52 PM
I knew this would be a top place winner! Many congrats:-) hugs jan xx
Gondolf Avatar
August 21, 2018 at 12:27 PM
Wow, Andrea, your parents REALLY had their hands full...hahaha Best of luck in the contest. John
Dietrich Avatar
August 21, 2018 at 4:13 PM
Actually i exaggerated a lot! they learned to shut the door on me and after a few days I adapted. But when I got older, i was back to my night owl self! Also, my mom says I was a wonderful baby. Other than being a night owl, I was very well behaved and even taught my sisters to use the potty!
Krutsinger Avatar
August 21, 2018 at 3:01 AM
Hilarious Andrea; it is amazing to me, but I think we may have been the same baby!
Dietrich Avatar
August 21, 2018 at 4:13 PM
My Iowa twin!
Marcum Wong Avatar
August 20, 2018 at 5:57 PM
You did great Andrea...and an example to help those who need it! Mine may need some help too. Best wishes for the contest! My son was like this, only worse, he was awake every two hours nonstop. I finally gave him cereal in a bottle, then he slept four hours. Hurricane Lane is headed directly for our island! : )
Allison Avatar
August 20, 2018 at 5:31 PM
oh so funny Andrea, I've got to amend my rhyme and focus on the meter:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx
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