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A Rattling Rhyme

The Baby Creep

Here in my Pampers. They took off my bib. Then they turned off the light, laid me here in my crib, yet I still see some light from the sun sunken low, but because I’m a toddler, to bed I must go? Well, I WON’T go to sleep ‘cause I just want to play! And I’m NOT a dumb blanket that just wants to lay in this crib! Should I cry? Should I NOT make a sound when I hear in the house they are moving around? I could cry. I could whimper or maybe I’ll scream, make them think I feel bad or I had a bad dream. What to do… what to do? Now my rattle I see. It will have to make do! Weren’t they nice leaving THAT there for me? So I pick up the rattle, I shake and I roll. I will shake that thing silly. Let THAT be my goal, ‘cause it’s stupid to sleep when there’s light still outside, so I’ll just be a creep, cause I’ll shake up a storm till they hear all my clatter and come to my room to see what is the matter. I’ll lay here and rattle. I’ll rattle, and though it’s till dawn, I’ll be rattling and rattling and rattling on!

Aug. 20, 2018 hopefully in the popular style of  Nina Parmenter
(I actually gave my parents quite the grief as a baby since I would not sleep till midnight, same as today!)

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Date: 8/31/2018 10:56:00 AM
Wonderful piece,Andrea...Very creative with this rattling style of a rhyme form...This is classic and beautiful.I envy your skills,great poet..Keep it going,pal...and Congrats on well deserved 1st place...
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Date: 8/30/2018 1:22:00 PM
Congratulations on your #1 win. Delightful, creative, and well-written. Enjoyed.
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Date: 8/29/2018 4:02:00 PM
You got into the mind of a terrible toddler in a direct and entertaining way. Well done Andrea.
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Date: 8/29/2018 6:31:00 AM
Excellent, Andrea, a worthy win. Now, time for your bottle :) . Viv x
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Date: 8/28/2018 6:34:00 PM
CONGRATULATIONS on your well-deserved win! GOOD ONE!! Janice
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Date: 8/28/2018 6:20:00 PM
You did exactly as the contest called for Andrea. I just couldn't seem to do that. I loved your theme being about the baby! Congratulations on your deserving First Place win! : ) xxoo
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Date: 8/28/2018 5:19:00 PM
You certainly deserve first prize, Andrea, for the rattle in this rhyme. Brilliantly conceived and executed. Kudos. ~ Gershon
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Date: 8/28/2018 5:09:00 PM
This a very deserved winner. The words really do just rush forward like a baby having a small tantrum. Loved it.
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Date: 8/28/2018 4:52:00 PM
I knew this would be a top place winner! Many congrats:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 8/28/2018 3:30:00 PM
Congratulations Andrea! You’re one of my 2 gold medalists! I didn’t have this one pinned as you actually, but this non-stop baby jibber jabber was just soooo enjoyable to read, and “rattled” in more ways than one! Thanks so much for thus wonderful entry!
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Date: 8/21/2018 12:27:00 PM
Wow, Andrea, your parents REALLY had their hands full...hahaha Best of luck in the contest. John
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 8/21/2018 4:13:00 PM
Actually i exaggerated a lot! they learned to shut the door on me and after a few days I adapted. But when I got older, i was back to my night owl self! Also, my mom says I was a wonderful baby. Other than being a night owl, I was very well behaved and even taught my sisters to use the potty!
Date: 8/21/2018 3:01:00 AM
Hilarious Andrea; it is amazing to me, but I think we may have been the same baby!
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 8/21/2018 4:13:00 PM
My Iowa twin!
Date: 8/20/2018 5:57:00 PM
You did great Andrea...and an example to help those who need it! Mine may need some help too. Best wishes for the contest! My son was like this, only worse, he was awake every two hours nonstop. I finally gave him cereal in a bottle, then he slept four hours. Hurricane Lane is headed directly for our island! : )
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Date: 8/20/2018 5:31:00 PM
oh so funny Andrea, I've got to amend my rhyme and focus on the meter:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx
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