August Skies

If you look backwards in time
you might see us

It was August
too many summers ago to recall
long after midnight
my brother and I
slipping through the valley of sleep
crawling out the window
onto the roof of the old sun-porch
drinking in excitement of the fresh night air
sprawled on a coarse gravel bed
searching the starry night
and watching for the first time
as the sky fell apart

then waiting for the world to end
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012


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Date: 8/24/2012 11:49:00 AM
this is good....nice tale of chicken licken philosophy....accurate portrayal of childrens minds...your low placing in the contest is grossly incorrect.....you should be at least a dozen places higher up the list.....best wishes Syd
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Date: 8/23/2012 2:47:00 PM
Congrats on your winning work with this very unique work..Sara
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Date: 8/22/2012 6:18:00 PM
First thing I thought was the movie War of the Worlds...BIG HUGS & Congrad's on this winning write. Light & love
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Date: 8/21/2012 11:34:00 AM
Many congratulations on your win Carrie xx
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Date: 8/21/2012 5:59:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in Tirzah's "Shooting Stars" contest Carrie. Love, Carol
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Date: 8/21/2012 3:40:00 AM
Carrie big congrats on your win...David
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Date: 8/20/2012 11:56:00 PM
Nice and Lovely Narrative,Carrie...Great work..Congrats on your win...
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Date: 8/20/2012 2:11:00 PM
Beautiful image of your first shooting stars! Congrats on your 14th place finish in my contest!~Tirzah~
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Date: 8/4/2012 7:29:00 AM
Dear Carrie - Another scene of sentiment so sweet it brings a tear to my eye. love, Kathy
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Date: 7/28/2012 6:33:00 PM
AWESOME way to look at the end of day . I would have enjoyed having a brother to do this with. I had all sisters and we just giggled all night in our beds! My grandkids got to see the barn swallows last night when they came over. they enjoyed it. I saw your tear poem did not make it into the winner list either. I do not understand that. Your entry was magnificent.
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Date: 7/27/2012 7:51:00 AM
charming and so reminiscent of the innocence of childhood! great poem!
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Date: 7/27/2012 1:10:00 AM
Carrie, you paint a nice picture here of your youth, hope the world doesn't end before I go to a garden party...David
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Date: 7/26/2012 7:31:00 PM
Only the second poem of yours that I've read and both are excellent! You've become a member in my favorite free verse writers club. I only have 5 writers of this genre in my select group: they're all women, and one is on this site. Her name is Raskin Bobbins, and you two brighten up this site immensely! I don't comment often, but when I do it's well deserved.
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