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His beat rages for hours darting to the computer table without time to greet Mom or Dad as the light pops every minute; wired in space, lost in blank words when he speaks, enthralled to level up and gain power points because he cares more for video than human talk. The light on the screen aims at Tekken and aliens raging a war against supremacy, somewhere outside the real world he can’t deal with, now. And he puts the light on, enticing him to dim a special nook in a lit, closed room. Kiddie books unread for weeks; a migraine splits past 12 am for a kid of nine years unable to control an impulse. He eats, plays and deals with his robot pals.. . . . . . . . . . . other boys take their bikes out, buts he pushes another button controlled by his mechanical allies with guns ,roars. . . . . . Video wreck, Game! Danger: I'm Creative Update Sponsor: Sheri Fresonke Harper by nette onclaud

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  1. Date: 3/29/2014 4:33:00 PM
    Nette, CONGRATS ON YOUR WIN..... Awesome poem!! Luv ~SKAT~

  1. Date: 3/24/2014 4:32:00 PM
    creative format and use of language, as always from you, nette! love "a migraine splits past 12 am" - congrats on your 1st place win! :)

  1. Date: 3/24/2014 9:18:00 AM
    Congrats on great win Nette

  1. Date: 3/23/2014 9:01:00 PM
    We are raising up a generation of social misfits with incredible hand eye coordination. Clever write Nette.. Sad reality!

  1. Date: 3/22/2014 9:22:00 PM
    Very clever creation, Congrats on the fine win, nette

  1. Date: 3/22/2014 8:06:00 PM
    Illuminating - congrats on your win

  1. Date: 3/22/2014 8:01:00 PM
    Holy light bulb! 100 nanowatts of creativity in this "dangerous" high-voltage piece!! : D Congratulations on your 1st place, Nette! Ruben.

  1. Date: 3/22/2014 7:38:00 PM
    yup REAL good! [I enjoyed you taking on a new topic ;)} Congrad's on your win

  1. Date: 3/22/2014 7:08:00 PM
    Congratulations on your first place win Nette. The poem is well done... Verlena

  1. Date: 3/22/2014 6:45:00 PM
    It's so true!! It is unfortunately the way of the generations to come, it is frightening to think what the future may hold. Excellent subject and I love the format!! Congratulations, Nette!....

  1. Date: 3/22/2014 6:44:00 PM
    Great win with such a wonderfully crafted shape poem. Yes I know him, he resides on "SOUP". Congrats Ron

  1. Date: 3/22/2014 6:27:00 PM
    Awesome poem, Nette, sorry you weren't inspired anew. This offers poem offers a message and a shape. Congratulations on your win!

  1. Date: 10/16/2012 3:45:00 PM
    Nette, congratulations in RIX's "VIDEO GAME EXTRAVAGANZA" gaming contest.. :-) always~pd

  1. Date: 10/13/2012 4:21:00 PM
    Wonderful shape poem and nice presentation,Nette.....Congratulations on your well deserved win in this contest....Kudos to you,great pal...

  1. Date: 10/12/2012 9:50:00 PM

  1. Date: 10/12/2012 12:51:00 PM
    Nette, big congrats on your win, love the poem and the layout...David

  1. Date: 10/12/2012 12:47:00 PM
    Congrats on your win!

  1. Date: 10/12/2012 10:24:00 AM
    What a sad child u painted in your entry, Nette...unfortunately it is probably not too uncommon a scene...with balance, video games can be a blessing, unfortunately many gamer children get "sucked" into the TV tube escaping the stresses of life...Great compare and contrast at the end...appreciated the somber tone too..CONGRATS, gwendolen

    Rix Avatar Gwendolen Rix
    Date: 10/12/2012 10:24:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    A great FIRST PLACE WIN!!!
  1. Date: 10/12/2012 5:46:00 AM
    Congratulations on your win in Gwen's "Video Game" contest Nette. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 10/3/2012 7:08:00 AM
    Superbly penned and so true of many kids this generation. Great shape poem, very creative Nette. They're hooked to their Gameboys, playstations and Nintendos...extremely addictive stuff.