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Sandcastles- a Sequel To Imperceptibly

Imperceptibly you withdrew Like the ebbing of the tide Leaving sand in your wake My heart’s wound open wide I just stood there all alone As I looked out at the sea Longing just to plunge in Have your love wash over me I was left with only sand Inside my empty heart And so to pass the time Built sandcastles, works of art My incessant flow of tears Wet the sand enough for me So I could mold and fashion As I turned my back to the sea They were majestic structures Filled with my wistful dream Each fantasy that I had Made those sandcastles gleam The sun burned my naked form As I worked away the time Each room, each moat and line Was a wish for you to be mine Suddenly, oh sweet surprise I felt water gush over me Sandcastles were swept away I was made love to by the sea At last, you've come back to me The tide of your love has turned The touch of your fluid arms Cools what the sun has burned I jump and swim in your waves Then I lie back as you caress You tease as you pull me down I’m immersed in tenderness The tide of your love had ebbed But now you’ve washed over me I will not ask reasons why I’m as happy as can be. Eileen Manassian Ghali

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 5/2/2013 9:32:00 AM
I loved the personification of the sea and how you took a spin on the usual cliches. Last stanza was amazing. The moment you start asking why, is the moment you start to doubt it. Children don't ask why doing silly things make themselves happy... they just relish in the feelings of it. Anyway... beautiful poem! The more you look at it, the more food for thought you can take from it.
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Date: 5/1/2013 4:31:00 PM
Ask no questions if you're sure the reasons are pure, I love the way you use the sea in this, and how you wiled away the hours. Excellent. Take care, Richard
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