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One Man's Sin...

Giant long claw like tentacles Slithering through the brush Plowing past homes in a hush Undenyably intentional Inteligence bent inside he's fewer Satiated coherent and sensible Charisma that's so apprehensible Invisible man ...an escaping lure His wickedness blasts sex's bite Under a dim light he digs a hole A lost man inside his own soul Hardly worth his appetite Implicit determinations prevail Driven by toxins and thoughts of whores Living in sin his skeleton soars His will and provocations set sail Beware of this danger I beg you my child Officer down..tonight one man's sin Pillages for a victorious win The Devil inside makes him beyond wild

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 4/17/2009 2:27:00 PM
Smile~Ooh, now this is a power house stinger to say the very least!!! I am not sure that I have ever read a write from "You" like this "Beautifully Gifted Jane Bowen!!!?":):)~But, it definately carries strong potential messages~which makes it a very worthy write~Although, only the author may know truly, the full extent of its subject and purpose!!?~"Officer down;" now that indeed, was extremely profound!!! On we go....
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Date: 4/14/2009 12:10:00 PM
sounds to me like the ravages of substance abuse, Jane, very very! well written! my poem 'broken friends' covers the same theme, your character is wonderfully described in dark-detail! you are a tremendous poet! and your comments are fun to read! thanks! Jim
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Date: 4/14/2009 6:01:00 AM
Dark as night, with raw reality....well written, Jane! ~ Carrie
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Date: 4/13/2009 4:48:00 PM
Very powerful warning in this great oem, Jane. I was stunned when I got to "Officer down...tonight one man's sin pillages..." Great insight! Love, Carolyn
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