On Creepy Hill

In a far away secluded place,
There’s a hill known for its beauty,
But lies a secret that finally revealed,
Its haunted, its creepy… wants to know the story?

There were five fourth graders,
Joined in the field demonstration in school,
They needed fine branches to form a shape,
That hill they chose because it’s the nearest,
And decided to go there before the sunset.

The distance was one kilometer so they walked happily,
Before going up to the hill they’ve felt uneasy,
Because once they heard that at the top lies a dead body,
But they still continued their journey anyway,
And saw a wrecked bamboo hut was empty.

Going further inside the creepy hill,
One girl was beaten by some ants or sticky spider,
Everyone were afraid and shouted,
They also heard people laughed at the end.,

The fourth graders looked at each other and wondered
What they were doing at six in the evening at the wrecked hut?
Three people, two pretty women and one handsome man,
Wore white clothes and seated on a dirty and old bench,
They looked enchanted nd beautiful but the children were afraid.

When three people looked at the children they smiled and asked;
“What are you doing here? Its’ getting dark, you’ve supposed to go home”
Shocked for the question they didn’t answer but ran as fast as they could,
One girl lost her one slipper while goes down on the hill so she cried hard,
They keep on running even if their feet were tired…they were so scared	,
The voices were still echoed in the air as they keep running.

When they reached home, all of them told the shocking story,
Their parents confirmed that hill is haunted for many years already,
It’s the city of unknown people because they heard it many times,
The children were chilled by the news and wailed.

The five fourth graders never attempted to went there for more than 30 years,
But the experienced they truly can’t forget for the rest of their lives,
Its Halloween month at that time and its Halloween night indeed,
No tricks and treats, no pumpkin, no costumes but a real experience,
The people leaving there knows the story and nobody dares to go up,
How about you? Want to try to go on the creepy hill too?



Date written: September 5, 2012

Note: the girl who lost her one slipper was ME
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012


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Date: 11/10/2013 5:35:00 PM
you brought the hill to life wonderfully...i think i'll stay away from that hill....congrats on your win :)
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Date: 11/10/2013 9:13:00 AM
congrats on your win Maria
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Date: 11/10/2013 12:52:00 AM
Congrats on the win, Maria
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Date: 11/9/2013 6:38:00 PM
wow, it is so cool to learn this is based on a true story. it was one of the scariest of the entries. BIG congrats for your well deserved win. It gets first place with me.
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Date: 11/9/2013 5:14:00 PM
Maria, Congratulations on your awesome Halloween win. Love ~ SKAT~
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Date: 11/14/2012 7:55:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in Nathan's "Free Verse Writers" contest Maria. Love, Carol
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Date: 11/13/2012 7:56:00 AM
Wow too creepy for me , well done and congratulations xx
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Date: 11/11/2012 11:29:00 PM
MY HEARTY CONGRATULATIONS ON YOUR AWESOME WIN MY FRIEND! love/hugs, LG
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Date: 11/11/2012 11:18:00 PM
CONGRATS MARIA ON A PHENOMENAL WRITE AND WIN FOR FREE VERSE LUV .. AMAZING WORK
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Date: 11/11/2012 7:28:00 PM
' Good win' Nate
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Date: 9/6/2012 6:04:00 AM
Hoping you continue to find the inspiration to write and share your wonderful poetry with us Maria. I enjoyed reading your poetry this morning while I am having a cup of coffee and starting my day with a smile. Love, Carol
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Date: 9/5/2012 10:07:00 AM
Wow!! It's a very beautiful story my dear!!! Congratulations on a great write! Good luck to you in the contest!!!
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Date: 9/5/2012 10:03:00 AM
enjoyed your story, creepy though
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