My Tell-Tale Heart- a Twist On Poe

It wasn’t that I’d done you wrong
I welcomed you into my heart’s home
I cherished you
And I fed you 
I protected you
I let you dream your dreams
In comfort
In safety
And I loved you
You were my own

And yet….
Day upon day
You waited for the opportunity
To confess
Knowing it would kill me
Knowing I would bleed 
You had a perverse pleasure
In planning….
To murder my heart
And I never had a clue
I trusted you

You planned…you observed
And all the while you smiled
Acting sweet and caring
Checking on me
Making sure my needs were met
And then
Out of nowhere
Like lightning
You struck my unsuspecting heart
Rammed the dagger in deep
And twisted
Twisted
To make sure
All the blood was spilt

Satisfied and sure of yourself
You hid your gruesome work
Underneath layers of indifference
Buried
Or so you thought
But every now and then
You hear it
I know….I can see it on your face
You hear the beating of my heart
My tell-tale heart
It still beats for you
It’s still alive
You try to deaden it
The noise
It’s driving you mad
As you wine and dine her

You try to make love to her
More vigorously than before
More often
More intensely
But as she is screaming your name
Begging you for more
In the crescendo of passion
You heart it
The beating of my heart
It drowns out her voice
It drowns out everything
It pounds in your head
You can’t go on
Angry
You leave her wanting
As you run out of the room screaming…
“STOP IT
I hear your cry
I killed your love
Why do you still haunt me?”

Beat after beat after beat
My heart is still alive
You feel it
You are drawn to it
She notices
They notice
You are agitated
Something is driving you mad
It’s me
You remember my goodness
My smile...my bed...my scent
my love...my body...my warmth
That pounding in your head 
Is desire for me

It gets louder…LOUDER
As you walk over to where I stand
With each quickened step
The pounding intensifies
Surely everyone must hear it
You come closer
The indifference gone from your face
Love...Passion...Repentance
I hear the beating
Thundering in my own ears
My love for you
You are closer
You put your head on my chest
Your tears wet my blouse
I run my hands through your hair
As I whisper…
“Listen…
My Tell-Tale heart 
Is still beating for you!”

Eileen Manassian Ghali

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013



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Date: 5/12/2013 11:49:00 AM
I've never read the Poe poem (though I have heard of it). Still this is marvelous work. I don't know whether to feel sympathy for the one that killed your love... or wish him the cruelest punishment. This, for me, is what makes writing really intriguing. When the line between the good guy and the bad guy is blurred... you can see both sides.
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 5/12/2013 11:54:00 AM
Hey, Timothy! Please....do read the Tell Tale Heart! It is easy to find on the internet...and then re-read this. It will make so much more sense! Hugs! BTW...thanks for stopping by!
Date: 4/5/2013 7:02:00 PM
If you think this is going to make me feel guilty Auntie................ it has lol. This is a great poem, love it. I think you captured the essence of Poe perfectly here. Take care, Regards Richard
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 4/5/2013 9:28:00 PM
Thanks, Richard. So glad that you enjoy reading my work! A good dose of guilt now and then is a good thing! :)
Date: 3/29/2013 12:59:00 PM
Hi Eileen I answered your question tomy Questionku
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Date: 3/28/2013 7:39:00 AM
This is weird, I commented on this poem yesterday and there is no comment here. Let's hope this one works. This is a powerful poem, it speaks to how people can make the same mistake over again. Still the heart wants what the heart wants. It made me think of my mom who kept going back to my dad, he was a bad boy and she was drawn to him. Some how he was also drawn to her. I was proud when she finally escaped.
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 3/28/2013 1:15:00 PM
Thanks for the comment, Richard. It does take a great deal of courage and fortitude to be able to walk away. I'm glad your Mom was able to do that. Hope you have a good day.
Date: 3/28/2013 6:15:00 AM
I love tell-tale heart...and I love this! I honored that you enjoyed my prose so much. Thank you!
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 3/28/2013 1:13:00 PM
It was a great piece, Caleb. Thanks for the visit! :)
Date: 3/27/2013 4:03:00 PM
very powerful and piercing - nice!
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 3/28/2013 12:28:00 AM
Thanks, sweet Ilene! hugs!
Date: 3/27/2013 1:32:00 PM
'In the crescendo of passion'-l liked this line. But then the whole poem is pounding with passionate and persistent whispers and tears...Great write!
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 3/28/2013 12:29:00 AM
Thanks so much, Ndaba. Heading your way to get acquainted! :)
Date: 3/27/2013 11:17:00 AM
wow hot, a woven story of a heartfelt tell tale heart, this is wonderful poetry Eileen...
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 3/28/2013 12:30:00 AM
Thanks, so much, Harry. Been reading up on you...your poems and blogs...and fav poems and poets. :) Glad to read your comment.
Date: 3/27/2013 8:33:00 AM
Brilliant exposé of a broken heart and how it can mend coz sometimes love doesn't die... it just sleeps and lays in waiting! I repeat, brilliant Eileen! Hugs, Jack xox
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Date: 3/28/2013 12:27:00 AM
HI JACK! Always good to hear from you! :) JACK...you just gave me an idea for a poem with your comment! Priceless. Hugs!
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