Mr.Vinal Hurts Still.......An Ee Cummings Echo

believe you me sirandmiss
a country made of this
youIItthem(a blended cocktail conspiracy)

you, Land of Calvin
Klein peacoat peacocks and Maybelline
Girl with cryproof mascara dripping(fashion
-first step lacking substance(of you
I sing: land of Oliver North and Ellen Degenerous
land of malcontent:singing(quietly)humming
cooking cuisine in add-one-minute-microwave

fashion.  Shaving with grandfathers
dull razors: regifted dull past-tense,
passe(useless musings) all and every
voice:merrier men singing old songs
for yesterday dancesteps contradict
wants for(pleading) a progressive and peaceful

now.  Rome then leaned on decayed pillars
now: chasing barbarian hordless lands
are stray grazing(starved weak) seeking,
singing  A-
mer
 i
ca, I mourn
you and every-one-of-millions
bitter wanting back gifts given
continually.  Awash in(apathetic)
angst:whispers-peaceful-timid-unichs

let freedom echo

hollow. xanex glazed eyelid
americans (sitting in assigned seat,
from a menu)
eating

screaming meekly.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009


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Date: 5/24/2009 3:55:00 AM
Steve, Congratulations for placing in: iMichele Nold-Godleske's ee cummings tribute contest. Very interesting view of America. I guess I better go see where you might be from since forgotten i where. Your write presented an interesting veiw of America. Although, thanks to freedom, we can choose which part(s) we live. It was great to read. Lovingly, Dane
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Date: 5/22/2009 3:01:00 PM
Steve, nice observations, congrats on your success in the contest...Raul
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Date: 5/22/2009 2:02:00 PM
Warmest congrats Steve! So totally awesome - sorry missed this the first time. Extremely well deserved! Love, Shar
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Date: 5/22/2009 6:45:00 AM
Hooray for you with this wonderful entry to the contest! Congratulations!! ~ Carrie
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Date: 5/21/2009 11:55:00 PM
Congrats on your success in Michele's contest Sreve Rgds Brian
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Date: 5/19/2009 8:09:00 PM
Steve this is a perfect cummings echo i believe he would sit in awe himself. he is one of my favorites and masterfully denied syntax...bravo my friend always a pleasure reading your work. -Jason
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Date: 5/7/2009 8:03:00 PM
Holy Cow! love it, love it, apex original. -AA
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Date: 5/3/2009 8:27:00 PM
BRAVO!! This is just an outstanding piece from line to perfect line. Thank you for your comment on my work, always apprecaited.
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Date: 5/2/2009 10:47:00 AM
Outstanding ! Steve, remarkable piece... loved every line... I take my hat off and bow low Sir Poet !!!!!!!
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Date: 4/27/2009 9:46:00 AM
Yes, Steve, I see the smoke of lightning, and hear the thunder ramping in the guinea grass of justice ... pure inspiration!
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Date: 4/27/2009 3:41:00 AM
You are brilliant Steve..your writing provokes my thoughts and move me to look deeper..love this message..love the second a nd fourth stanza...wonderful and the ending..eating from menu with assigned seat..killer.
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Date: 4/26/2009 7:16:00 AM
Truly amazing..... I enjoyed this very much.
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Date: 4/25/2009 10:15:00 PM
A beautiful tribute to ee my friend. You are so gifted. I lol at Carolyn's comment. I myself could read these all day as long as they are like this one. Great luck in the contest. Love the "xanex" line, I see others do as well. LOL Great writing as always. Smiles from Lolita
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Date: 4/25/2009 1:49:00 PM
I think y ee have capturedcummingsso well here, Steve! Love the references to Ellen, Calvin Klein, Ollie North. The image of "xanex-glazed" Americans is a nice touch for the ending. I've s ee n somanyofthesecummings tributes, methinks I n ee ds to take a break or my iiiis will get sore.
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