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Meditation---Charlotte's Contest

The starlight bares its glittered thread while nightfall drops a fine sarong, and trance ascends far overhead breaths’ vision glowing in pure song. While nightfall drops a fine sarong in solace flushed …dark turns to light that galaxies meet to adorn one fragrant reign of soul’s birthright. And trance ascends far overhead to drape tranquility…God’s kiss pouring a mist on eyes that wed dusk to sun , O heavenly bliss. Breaths’ vision glowing in pure song joy and content bring harmony for starlit trail…all worlds belong, on streams of oneness, peace holds me. ------------ *Form of Poetry: RETOURNE It contains four quatrains (four-line stanzas), and each line has eight syllables. The first stanza's second line must also be the second stanza's first line, the first stanza's third line is the third stanza's first, and the first stanza's fourth line is the fourth stanza's first. Retournes may or may not use rhyme. *ANY FORM, ANY SUBJECT CONTEST Sponsor: Charlotte Puddifoot

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Date: 11/7/2013 12:13:00 PM
nice win Nette, * HUGS & LOVE <3 ~SKAT~
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Date: 11/7/2013 6:26:00 AM
Is there ANY form of poetry that you can't do well my friend?...I read this through several times and was amazed how the repeating lines fit and flowed so easily in each verse...The entire poem brought me a feeling of peace and serenity...Congratulations and thanks for starting my day on a positive note! - Tim
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Date: 11/6/2013 7:08:00 PM
Nette. ... CONGRATULATIONS ON YOUR WINNING POEM!!! awesome :) LUV~ LINDA
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Date: 11/6/2013 6:53:00 PM
Congrats, Nette..this one was marvellous!! Jag
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Date: 11/6/2013 4:22:00 PM
BiG congrats to you and in answer to your question, No, I had no time to blog about my contest results. I am just too busy. But I hope to put up a new contest very soon.
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Date: 11/6/2013 4:10:00 PM
Displays a masterful command of poetic forms while no distraction from the emotional quality of the poem is felt. Congratulations on a great entry.... Jake
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Date: 11/6/2013 2:51:00 PM
Congratulations on your deserved win sweet Nettie..Ow how i love that night sarong..A beautiful post.How are you dear?tnks for stopping by
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Date: 11/6/2013 8:22:00 AM
Good morning Nette.
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Date: 11/5/2013 5:47:00 PM
well, after reading many gritty and hard-hitting pieces this one was like an oasis of calm, nette! balm to the soul, beautiful words...congrats on your win! :)
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Date: 11/5/2013 5:06:00 PM
Hi Nette, A very unique and creative write..well done! Ken
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Date: 11/4/2013 5:31:00 PM
Very cool form I think I might give it a try.
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Date: 11/4/2013 3:20:00 PM
awesome write, Nette - and love this form
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Date: 11/4/2013 1:19:00 PM
Nette, your poem gives a lot for the Spirit-Heart & Mind to feast upon.Graceful, line for line.
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Date: 11/4/2013 11:15:00 AM
It takes spiritual depth and eloquence to weave such a beautiful word tapestry. Perhaps, I'll give this form a shot one day. Finely delivered!
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Date: 11/4/2013 11:13:00 AM
Liked that last line the most! Good luck in the contest! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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Date: 11/4/2013 10:15:00 AM
"And trance ascends..." This idea relates to the out-of-body experience as do many of the lines, dear nette. So happy to communicate with you. Love, daver
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Date: 11/4/2013 10:04:00 AM
I have noticed your work today..It has great flow, rhythm, and rhyme within its lines..Reads like a winner to me..Sara..Your presence at my work lights up my life..
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Date: 11/4/2013 9:50:00 AM
Another amazing write this is my very dear friend w/ a great & unique form. So love it. Thank you so much for this precious gem of urs & sharing a great form. I'm so interested to learn it. Hope I can make a try when I've time. For now, bz work again. Mon & Tues. are my loaded days;) so, i need to rest earlier. My hearty thanks for stopping by 4 me. Quite better now & I'm always praying for my aunt. Thanks for being there my dearest friend. Big Hugs!Goodnyt Tcare!. Talk to u soon again. loveuLeo
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Date: 11/4/2013 9:23:00 AM
A unique piece of wonderful self realization adorned with beautiful imagination. Loved much and enjoyed too. Good luck in the contest. My fav. poem too. Loved always, bl
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Date: 11/4/2013 6:54:00 AM
Wow, this is a tremendous write my friend! You have masterfully portrayed a meditation in any form and on any basis! I surely loved the intricate weavings of this tender poem Nette! You are a beautiful poet my friend, a master of this craft! Great Work!!
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Date: 11/4/2013 6:20:00 AM
..... O. O..o..o... heavenly bliss ..... what a pleasure to read this beautiful poem, Nette. - Good luck in the contest! - Wish you a nice day. - oxox // Anne-Lise :))
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