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Below is the poem entitled MEDITATION---CHARLOTTE'S CONTEST which was written by poet nette onclaud. Please feel free to comment on this poem. However, please remember, PoetrySoup is a place of encouragement and growth.

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The starlight bares its glittered thread
while nightfall drops a fine sarong,
and trance ascends far overhead
breaths’ vision glowing in pure song.

While nightfall drops a fine sarong
in solace flushed …dark turns to light
that galaxies meet to adorn
one fragrant reign of soul’s birthright.

And trance ascends far overhead
to drape tranquility…God’s kiss
pouring a mist on eyes that wed
dusk to sun , O heavenly bliss.

Breaths’ vision glowing in pure song
joy and content bring harmony
for starlit trail…all worlds belong,
on streams of oneness, peace holds me.


*Form of Poetry: RETOURNE
It contains four quatrains (four-line stanzas),
and each line has eight syllables.

The first stanza's second line must also be
the second stanza's first line, the first stanza's third line
is the third stanza's first, and the first stanza's
fourth line is the fourth stanza's first.

Retournes may or may not use rhyme.

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  1. Date: 11/7/2013 12:13:00 PM
    nice win Nette, * HUGS & LOVE <3 ~SKAT~

  1. Date: 11/7/2013 10:35:00 AM
    Beautiful poem. ( pouring a mist on eyes that wed--dusk to sun , O heavenly bliss.) I embrace this poetry, it is excellent! G.

  1. Date: 11/7/2013 6:26:00 AM
    Is there ANY form of poetry that you can't do well my friend?...I read this through several times and was amazed how the repeating lines fit and flowed so easily in each verse...The entire poem brought me a feeling of peace and serenity...Congratulations and thanks for starting my day on a positive note! - Tim

  1. Date: 11/6/2013 7:08:00 PM

  1. Date: 11/6/2013 6:53:00 PM
    Congrats, Nette..this one was marvellous!! Jag

  1. Date: 11/6/2013 5:02:00 PM
    Excellent poem on meditation, seems you have your share of bliss. should be a winner...peter

  1. Date: 11/6/2013 4:22:00 PM
    BiG congrats to you and in answer to your question, No, I had no time to blog about my contest results. I am just too busy. But I hope to put up a new contest very soon.

  1. Date: 11/6/2013 4:10:00 PM
    Displays a masterful command of poetic forms while no distraction from the emotional quality of the poem is felt. Congratulations on a great entry.... Jake

  1. Date: 11/6/2013 2:51:00 PM
    Congratulations on your deserved win sweet Nettie..Ow how i love that night sarong..A beautiful post.How are you dear?tnks for stopping by

  1. Date: 11/6/2013 8:22:00 AM
    Good morning Nette.

  1. Date: 11/6/2013 12:59:00 AM
    Your retourne was beautiful and very well written. Very carefully written work, and bravo, nette, on a great poem and win! :) G.

  1. Date: 11/5/2013 5:47:00 PM
    well, after reading many gritty and hard-hitting pieces this one was like an oasis of calm, nette! balm to the soul, beautiful words...congrats on your win! :)

  1. Date: 11/5/2013 5:06:00 PM
    Hi Nette, A very unique and creative write..well done! Ken

  1. Date: 11/4/2013 5:31:00 PM
    Very cool form I think I might give it a try.

  1. Date: 11/4/2013 4:35:00 PM
    I believe you can write any form and subject and still make it beautiful as ever, you are always a sweet return in my heart dear Nette, it's a lovely entry for the contest xxx

  1. Date: 11/4/2013 3:20:00 PM
    awesome write, Nette - and love this form

  1. Date: 11/4/2013 1:19:00 PM
    Nette, your poem gives a lot for the Spirit-Heart & Mind to feast upon.Graceful, line for line.

  1. Date: 11/4/2013 11:15:00 AM
    It takes spiritual depth and eloquence to weave such a beautiful word tapestry. Perhaps, I'll give this form a shot one day. Finely delivered!

  1. Date: 11/4/2013 11:13:00 AM
    Liked that last line the most! Good luck in the contest! Peace & Love Matthew Anish

  1. Date: 11/4/2013 10:15:00 AM
    "And trance ascends..." This idea relates to the out-of-body experience as do many of the lines, dear nette. So happy to communicate with you. Love, daver