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Last Time I Saw You Alive...

We exchanged harsh words...
I let you walk out that door
without a goodbye

***For Paula's contest

deathsonsenryu

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Carol Eastman

Date: 2/11/2012 8:44:00 AM

Congratulations on the win.

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 8/20/2010 2:12:00 PM

congrats on the well deserved win!! Take care!

Lynette Chachere

Date: 8/18/2010 6:23:00 PM

there are many intense emotions there in moments such as these.and seconds later regret comes in.but there is always that question, who will go after the other... great write, Tim. I hope all goes well. ~Always&Forever Lynette

Carrie Richards

Date: 8/17/2010 5:36:00 PM

I'm so glad this made it to the winners circle. It was very moving. A lesson in it for all of us. :) Congratulations, Tim!

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 8/17/2010 12:10:00 PM

Congratulations on your win Tim. This is a moving poem. Thank you for your comments also. Aloha, Connie

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 8/17/2010 8:50:00 AM

Congratulations on your win Tim in Paula Swanson's contest " Two Wrongs Don't Make A Right". Love, Carol

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 8/17/2010 6:56:00 AM

Congratulations on your win with this incredible write, Tim. (still no news yet -- in this case, no news is bad news) Love, Carolyn

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 8/16/2010 8:14:00 PM

Congrats on well deserved win, Tim

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/16/2010 7:45:00 PM

One of my favorites in this contest. Congrats, Tim! LUv, Andrea

Joyce Johnson

Date: 8/16/2010 7:09:00 PM

Congratulations on yur win with this sad senryu. Love, Joyce

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 8/16/2010 6:52:00 PM

Congrats Tim on your winning poem in Paula's contest .. wise words to heed.. enjoy your sweet success.. with luv from Italy..caio..luv..

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 8/16/2010 8:54:00 AM

Dear Tim, I know your heart aches when you think of this. You had no way of knowing this would be the last time you would see him. I think Paula will be very moved by this true story. There is nothing that can compensate for such a loss. Love, Carolyn

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 8/15/2010 5:57:00 PM

sad thoughts...hope it never happens like that.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/15/2010 11:49:00 AM

Good luck in the contest with this great write..Hope just a write and not life...Keep the creative pen flowing...Thanks for stopping by and commenting on my work about "Wal-Marts Georgia"...Glad you got a laugh out of reading it..Sara

Katherine Stella

Date: 8/15/2010 6:19:00 AM

hate when this happens this is a great entry for the contest I just finished mine called liar liar lol also thanks for your kind comment on my poem for 2012 yikes have a great day Tim

Carrie Richards

Date: 8/14/2010 4:19:00 PM

It is a mistake we have all made at one time our another....painful lesson indeed. This is exactly what Paula's contest is needing....the honest double errors in judgement we all make. Well done. Carrie

Date: 8/14/2010 10:58:00 AM

Unforunately, this happens far to often--then one lives with the regrets. Good luck in the contest. Have a wonderful weekend. Karen

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 8/14/2010 4:34:00 AM

Well expressed thoughts, Tim

Jay Del Fierro

Date: 8/13/2010 10:44:00 PM

so true isn't it,the impact of words said,or not said can linger either way....peace , jay

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 8/13/2010 10:38:00 PM

Great Senryu Tim..good luck in the contest.. enjoyed during my long flight.. with luv..

Caroline Cécile Delacroix

Date: 8/13/2010 9:05:00 PM

:( Oh! So difficult and painful, though a well written Senryu, Tim! Good luck in the contest. Caroline.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/13/2010 8:47:00 PM

AWESOME. well, I could not think of ONE thing for this contest (because I never do bad and I never regret the little bad I do. hahaha, and I'm not even joshing!) good luck with this gem. LUv, Andrea