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His Old Pick-Up Truck

He begs me to come, but he's run out of luck You won't catch me dead in that beat-up old truck! It was painted the color is rust But you can't be too sure...since it's covered in dust!... The engine must idle, (about an hour is good) You can feel the vibration, around the whole neighborhood A life is at risk, if you go for a ride! The windshield is broken, and leaks rain inside It makes a weird noise, rides bumpy and rough The dashboard is littered and covered with "stuff" The seat cushion's torn, and it pokes at my rear The dog sits beside us and licks at my ear There's no place below us, for resting my feet There's a hole in the floor, O my God, there's the street!!! The windows don't close, so there's more than a breeze Wrappers from Twinkies, a Burger King box... One lonely old sneaker, and smelly old socks Half a stale donut smashed down on the floor Darn!! The dog beat me to it, and is looking for more!! The muffler is loose, you can see the sparks fly Dirty looks from the folks, who get smoke in their eyes When we drive by the neighbors, I duck my head and I hide I'm no Prima Donna....but I've still got some pride!! He loves that old truck, he calls her a gem! Make him choose between us??? ....I'd be out on a limb!!
------------------------------------------------------------------------------- For Verlena Walker's Slamming Battle Contest

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  1. Date: 5/11/2014 9:03:00 PM
    You show him girl.. Great win Carrie!

  1. Date: 5/11/2014 10:38:00 AM
    This is so much fun, I see that you too followed the instructions. Great job, congratulations.

  1. Date: 5/10/2014 7:32:00 PM
    LOL you know I've ridden in a truck like this and the young man was HELPING me, [don't look a gift horse in the mouth? whatever that means LOL] good on you Carrie congrad's light & love

  1. Date: 5/10/2014 11:01:00 AM
    Well good luck, sounds like your stuck with this hard core ole driver who so loves his truck. Congrats on win Carrie.

  1. Date: 5/10/2014 8:11:00 AM
    This is a great slam on his gem..I love it Carrie...I just hope you weren't going to eat the donut....congrats Tim

  1. Date: 5/10/2014 3:02:00 AM
    Very impressive write Carrie ! Congrats on a merited top win !

  1. Date: 5/9/2014 5:56:00 PM
    This truck is getting great mileage, though, isn't it? Great rhythm and rhyme, and not too rough on the slamming part. Congratulations! Cheers, Roy

  1. Date: 5/9/2014 2:16:00 PM
    Carrie, you slam. Congratulations on placing first in my contest. Verlena

  1. Date: 6/20/2013 6:35:00 PM
    I wouldn't ride in it either..must be a girl thing! congrats. BG

  1. Date: 6/20/2013 4:33:00 PM
    Sounds like home to me! Got one just like it....haha...wanna go for a ride Carrie?? Just to fish in....down on the river....congratulations.. awesome!

  1. Date: 6/20/2013 5:58:00 AM
    Sounds like my dad's fishin' truck. I can just see you bouncing up and down in this old heap...haha! Funny stuff, Carrie...and congrats!

  1. Date: 6/19/2013 9:11:00 PM
    Its fabulous Carrie, great win....Seren

  1. Date: 6/19/2013 7:45:00 PM
    I agree it would be a rough ride in, congratulations on your big win Carrie it's a very entertaining read xxx

  1. Date: 7/20/2011 6:20:00 PM
    Love it!!! Congrats. to you!

  1. Date: 7/16/2011 4:13:00 AM
    Being a country boy I love pick up trucks. I had one like this but my wife won out and now she has a much nicer one that ...she won;t let me touch for some unknown reason ..? I'm with Andrea on this one for sure. different strokes I guess. Thanks for sharing this beaut.If I still had my old truck I'd paste it to the windshield with old bubble gum from under the seat somewhere . Enjoyed and into my favs

  1. Date: 7/15/2011 9:04:00 PM
    gosh, I just know i saw this before, didn't I? But I don't see my comment below. anyway, A big congrats on this one. It's a very funny one that I'd put close to the top!

  1. Date: 7/15/2011 1:00:00 PM
    We men and our choice of automobiles is a little silly isn't it. Congratulations on the win. I really enjoyed this little gem. Mike

  1. Date: 7/15/2011 9:00:00 AM
    Still have trucks around here like that.Congrats on your win,Carrie.

  1. Date: 7/15/2011 7:28:00 AM
    My congratulations on this win in the contest of P.D., Carrie

  1. Date: 7/15/2011 6:22:00 AM
    Congrats on your win Carrie..enjoyed your poem.