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Gray-Stoned Vineyard

vines grow free the ruins crashed in nature gray and green

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Debbie Duncan

Date: 1/4/2013 3:53:00 PM

Love the haiku here. Have a great New Year Laura ;}

Harry Horsman

Date: 12/7/2012 3:02:00 PM

yes i too love the imagery here, one of the best Haiku's i seen for a long time...

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 11/20/2012 10:12:00 PM

Hi Laura, some how i love the image that emerges in your haiku.... i just love nature, gray and all.... always~pd

Duke Beaufort

Date: 11/15/2012 7:26:00 PM

I like it. Reminds me of Ozymandias. So you can be Shelley with grace and simplicity since vineyards are the works of mankind. Wonderful

Sandra Adams

Date: 11/14/2012 7:26:00 PM

awesome image...clearly can see this one...great haiku!

Laila Andresen Mjelde

Date: 11/12/2012 2:05:00 AM

Beautiful, well written very nice Haiku... Hugs - Laila

John Loving Iii

Date: 11/11/2012 7:11:00 PM

Ruins are the wrinkles of the earth.

Terry O'Leary

Date: 11/9/2012 3:08:00 PM

Interesting image... very nice... Terry (& thanks for your kind comments)

Stephen Parker

Date: 11/9/2012 8:05:00 AM

If you want to make it a pure haiku, here is a suggestion. Vines freely sprouting. Archaic buildings crumbling. Grey stones shroud green shoots. Richard is right. This is a scintillating scene captured by your distinguished mind. I love the contrast! Man-made artifacts tumble down, forever gone; while nature recycles treasure from its trove. Enjoyed your verse!

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 11/9/2012 1:53:00 PM