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Fatal Valentine

He rose She watched He paused She gazed He twitched She sighed He packed She froze He waited She turned He glanced She shivered He moved She whispered He paced She sobbed He freaked She called He frowned She pleaded He kissed She wept He turned She knew He left

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Wilma Neels

Date: 1/21/2011 4:29:00 AM

This is quite a riveting and sad write Deidre ;) Wilma

Richard Pickett

Date: 12/31/2009 11:36:00 AM

Very nice Deirdre, Lovely indeed. Go into your personal info click the box I want to receive Soup mail...and you should be able to receive....Great write....Taz

Ashlee Tilford

Date: 10/2/2009 9:22:00 AM

Great piece. Written with such passion. Love it.

Not Anymore

Date: 3/10/2009 11:16:00 AM

You wrote I read You waited I smiled You read I wrote: That was awesome

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 2/14/2009 8:50:00 AM

Dear Dierdre, this poem beautifully tells such a sad story. I hope "he" has been replaced by someone more worthy of such a talented, sensitive woman.

Monique Davis

Date: 2/8/2009 2:12:00 PM

That was artistically written and captured my attention every step of the way. I felt like I was watching this couple change their life play by play. Beautiful- Monique

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 2/8/2009 12:11:00 PM

wowser!!!!! I thought one of them was going to shoot the other oneLOL good write. Light & LOve Debbie

Sandy Schermerhorn

Date: 2/7/2009 10:41:00 AM

rivioting piece of poetry here with this great write so sad but excellectly written

Brian Strand

Date: 2/7/2009 7:27:00 AM

well writtrn vignette Deirdre.Style suits the pace very well.rgds Brian & thanks for your welcom comments

Kristin Baker

Date: 2/6/2009 6:25:00 PM

Great poem...sad but so true for some unfortunately. Hope your valentine's day is better then this! Kristin

Maryam Jameela Haniff

Date: 2/6/2009 1:44:00 PM

oooh my! not a happy valentine, so sry for them...if they r real...sweet write!...*/*Maryam

Sean Kelly

Date: 2/6/2009 12:33:00 PM

So , that bear hug , did'nt work !! .. Deirdre this is a superb piece of story telling , in a most unique way ... Excellent !!! ..

Michael Degenhardt

Date: 2/6/2009 11:52:00 AM

Oh my, that's horrible! Not the poem, style or writing mind you, but the happening, what occured for the two of them. That's not a way to spend a Valentine. Michael