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An Early, Experimental Poem of Alternate Lines

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This was an early experimental attempt to interweave alternate lines that are logical and fit together when read (after the first line, which should be read before the second and also before the third) then one should read every other line...and, the last line should be read every time, also. The intent was to write something a little weird that nevertheless made some kind of sense, like images flashing, one after another, on a screen.

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An Early, Experimental Poem of Alternate Lines

The mirror reflects, obliquely,
a peculiar yellow butterfly -- it flutters, flutters
the specks of black my beard is made of
on the breeze.  A daffodil hangs down its treasure
and I spread shaving cream, in great white puffs,
shielding from the wind and rain its yellow
across my face.  The nose protrudes, ridiculous
excrescence.  A leaf half green sweeps up in circles
in the whiteness all around.  A weak chin, think I,
of windy sighs.  Squirrels crack acorns, crunching,
down into a patchy neck.  Very unsatisfactory
remembering winter's almost famine.  The trees --
appearance.  Altogether so.  Oh well.
Quiet.  Steady.  Sturdy.  Oh well.
The mirror reflects, but not uniquely.

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  1. Date: 3/7/2012 1:59:00 PM
    I hope you are well, Leo...I had to come back to add this poem to my favourites. I was thinking about it today and then I thought about Narcissus...and I thought it wonderful all over again!

  1. Date: 2/18/2012 10:25:00 AM
    Oh I love your experimental poem, Leo! This is quite a unique and refreshing reading experience.