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For Herda & Wangugi

To become a man he has a difficult task:
he must be brave enough to kill a beast.
A tradition in his tribe, you may ask.
The boy is not fierce, strong, or fast in the least.

The boy has hardly a weapon, hand-made, and surely not a gun:
but a long stick with a sharpened tip, a spear.
This is the tradition, such hunting calls for a shun
from the village if the task is not complete, that is clear.

The lion is too fast, the boy cannot outrun it.
The boy must be silent; the lion is too strong,
and has spotted the boy, it picks up it's speed.
The boy was not careful; the lion too strong.

There is a stuggle, but the boy has killed the lion.
The boy is now a man in his village.

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  1. Date: 4/25/2012 6:42:00 PM
    You tell such important tales and bring us where we may never have gone, the content is excellent to improve the form I would gift you this TRY to improve your meter [the rise and fall of your voice] try to stick to a 10-12 syllable count per line. It has been a joy to read your verse this eve. Light & Love

    Youngless Avatar Caroline Youngless
    Date: 4/25/2012 6:47:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you Debbie. Some of these poems on here still need revising. I was playing with this one some, it's not yet complete. I enjoy hearing your insight. <3 C.R.Y.