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A Raven's Thirst - Part 1

I Aloft, from highest cliffs o’er icy seas, upon great wings of arrogance and pride, the raven whispers soft, on ocean’s breeze, notes cloaked with charm to lure his future bride. In midst of kith, to sate his lust, he vies to reign supreme, and bathes in self-adore. Magnificence against cool ashen skies, yet ‘neath the husk, so rotten to the core. As shallow suns recede and rise anew day after day, still beats his heart alone. One frigid night the moonlight's silver hue imparts the word his reveries have flown… and so upon this night is hatched a plan, to seek his bride he takes the form of man. **based on Inuit legend**

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 8/30/2010 7:54:00 AM
As I read your Sonnet, I get the same feeling like when my father used to tell me bedtime stories as I was little. You really are great with sonnets and this story is just amazing. Emily
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Date: 8/25/2010 6:09:00 AM
ohhhh oUUUU! hmm love NA lore! on to part 2 to polish the rare jewel work wee bit more on meter & sillie bullies :) Light & Love
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Date: 8/23/2010 6:52:00 PM
What a great descriptive and mysterious sonnet! I love so many of the lines in this- revealing the legend. I can't wait to read the next part! Wonderful! hugs, kris~
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Date: 8/23/2010 11:32:00 AM
Very clever Shaoron, enjoyed the Sonnet. Have your self a wonderful day,..p.d.
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Date: 8/23/2010 8:03:00 AM
very Poe'ish love the style and looking forward to part 2.
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Date: 8/22/2010 11:39:00 AM
very well done Sharon. ..such a talent you are...always Michael
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Date: 8/22/2010 10:45:00 AM
Really a brilliant write, Sharon! The Inuit are really interesting people! Wished I could visit Greenland once, but probably that will be only adream! Enjoyed your legend-poem, and have a great time!...Gert:)
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Date: 8/22/2010 8:50:00 AM
Hi Sharon :) what a brilliant sonnet that gripped my imagination-- I'm definitely heading over to part 2 now-- I wonder how many parts this will be in? This is really interesting and I loved your title for it too :) way to go for writing this one --hugs nikko :)
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Date: 8/22/2010 12:34:00 AM
ooh, you really leave us wanting to hear more, Sharon. Great beginning!!!
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Date: 8/21/2010 6:07:00 PM
Brilliant recount of a very intriguing Inuit legend. I had never heard about this before, Sharon. Isn't it fun to use legends as a basis for poetry? I have quite a collection of legends and mysteries poetry and when I have enough, I'm hoping to get them published. Maybe you should consider publishing as well. There are a lot of online publishers who would like this poem about the raven turned man. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 8/20/2010 2:06:00 PM
Now this is a story I look forward to following. The raven of dark and mystical lore. I have to agree with Chris, it's an enjoyable piece. It's my kind of poetry to be honest. Roll on the continuing gems >> James ;-)
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Date: 8/20/2010 10:55:00 AM
BRAVO!!! TAH
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