Your Abandon

Years ago, you found me grounded with wings afraid to fly.
Toting smiles and wants of note, you paused to view my sky.
Was soon that I thought once, and you concurred twice,
that merging our styles would make a love themed paradise.
Years confirmed our intangible wares of mutual shares.
Even our highs and lows equally sighed with visual cares.
I never grew concerns about thunder, so I did not feel around,
poke or peek under for shudders from lightening blunders.

I saw no clue stains for panic in any cracks of tragic.
Then, at my joy’s peak in romance’s security streak,
you turned cold and scowled, ice water endowed.
Stayed confusion hovered in my same daily clouds
as your words and actions rose into caustic attacks.
My full tears left clear tracks, but my world swirled black.
Trapped in walls with love's silt, my once full heart spilt
as your cold face growl tilted me with its cruel wilt.

Bones gone, feelings stung and laid me on our bed you built.
Sob chokes watched hopes darken and fall on our quilt.
I heard your shoes sounding the harsh retreat of a final leave.
My reality undone, I spun inside a brutal, nightmarish tide.
My shivers surged frail coldness, exposing me as clueless. 
In my mind, fantasies fumbled seeking a stronghold.
I beseeched memories to transition into numbing flakes
that would deaden all my grieving from this love mistake.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018



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Date: 8/10/2025 8:37:00 PM
This one got better and better for me as I read along. That final stanza is super emotional and powerful. Really hits hard
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Date: 7/1/2018 1:44:00 AM
I am hurt. I am touched. Why are you feeling abandoned! Let him abandoned. Cheers n go ahead.
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Date: 6/26/2018 6:03:00 PM
I felt transfixed while reading this CayCay. A superb window into the complexities of dealing with relationships. Brilliant! : ) xxoo
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Date: 6/16/2018 3:07:00 AM
Oh, so much to ponder, in this profound poem, which i believe is a classic, your words penetrate Cay Cay, one cannot help but to taken on your journey and feel the pain...again wonderful poetry..love it so much..
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Date: 6/14/2018 5:17:00 PM
A breakup can be a painful and shattering experience CayCay, you have written this so well. Tom
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Date: 6/14/2018 4:02:00 PM
I felt a chill run down my spine with your deep dark lines CayCay -you portray so well a vulnerable person in a relationship who is betrayed by the one they trusted:-( hugs jan xx
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CayCay Jennings
Date: 6/14/2018 4:39:00 PM
Thank you so much, Sweetheart - it is beyond good to know that I succeeded, at least with you, in conveying all I intended in the stanzas. I haven't been around much for about a month and really miss you, and others. I hope to dedicate many hours soon to just reading - something I also miss. Hope you are better than healed, Jan. Poetry hugs ... CayCay
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