Pampas Grass

pampas grass
stirs whirls dances...
tinkling sound dog hugs,

funnynaturehaiku

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Debbie Guzzi

March 26, 2012 at 5:43 PM

Hi Sara yes traditional haiku is about nature but the verse Sucker was mean to be an example of western/ comtemporary/ modern haiku which does not have to be about nature and can include man..I prefer the traditional form. Your haiku, though about nature, still qualifies as western etc. because you used personification & punctuation though ..I am not sure what dogs hugs refers to? or why a comma was necessary? Light & Love

Debbie Guzzi

March 26, 2012 at 6:21 PM

LOL I thought maybe it was a new trend? Hey it's only a comma hal;f the time I have on two differnt shoes! [I have two pairs of the same same shoes one brown & one black!]