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On Bloodletting

She is cutting again... The stainless steel razor is hope pressed against her skin She wants to stop but the pain eludes the truth. she will try to stray from the mutilation but the disease will call again until she reaches for the reflective bliss She digs it into her skin focusing on the discolored flesh reality begins to slip away and she is once again pulled in the sound of torn skin is a symphony now and the only thing keeping her warm is the blood running away from it's source and as she lies on the bathroom floor her heart pumping harder her arms burning with satisfaction she smiles the metallic smell is a perfume that allows her to drift into her world of lies and "make believes" she grabs for the blade again... ...and she bleeds

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 1/23/2009 1:43:00 PM
This works really well. I used this theme myself on a poem a few years back ('40', I'll post it on here). I like how you have grabbed the the theme and really made it work in this poem. Pretentions at 'poetic prancing' is avoided and the reader is is faced with having to make sense of a narrative that should be filled with emotion (that is the expectation) but is just described. Language use is great!
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Date: 1/22/2009 10:35:00 AM
Weird as this may seem i get wat you r saying..=/ awsome poem (Joanie)
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