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Moonless Night I

City lights.
Notes out of tune
On Silence’s Stave.

allegoryinspirationalintrospectionhaiku

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Andrea Dietrich

August 8, 2014 at 7:48 PM

WOW. I was not quite sure what stave was and sure enough, I looked it up and it's from staff of music. This is incredible.

Phyllis Babcock

March 18, 2013 at 1:58 PM

Deb is right on this and I have learned a lot from her. I still struggle with haiku so keep on writing. love phyl

Debra Squyres

March 12, 2013 at 1:41 PM

good haiku !!

Andrea Dietrich

December 29, 2012 at 11:39 AM

I like the contrast this one gives, Vassilis.

Vassilis Comporozos

January 3, 2013 at 1:02 AM

Thanks a lot!

Debbie Guzzi

December 29, 2012 at 8:48 AM

For me what you have written is not a haiku and just so both of us may have the pleasure of a poetic discussion I will state why I feel this way. By using the [.] you have taken away the feeling of an open ended experience for me, the in the moment feeling is deminishedby using not 1 but 2 periods and the use of the phrase [silence's stave] is too free verse and not as simple as porridge ;) I'd love to keep discussing this with you. Light & Love Debbie

Vassilis Comporozos

January 3, 2013 at 1:08 AM

Thanks for your comments. I agree with what you say about the free - verse style in the last line. You're right on that point. To be precise, categorising it as haiku, I mainy mean a haiku-like poem, (producing a 'haiku effect', if I can put it this way.). A really authentic haiku must have concrete images, and that's not always easy.

Debbie Guzzi

December 29, 2012 at 8:29 AM

I hope it is OK to call you Vass [that's one long name for someone with carpel tunnel to type LOL] thank you for noting my haiku & yes I too now understand much of what is labeled haiku on-line is not..and that my form though correct may still be an unsatisfying haiku.

Vassilis Comporozos

January 3, 2013 at 1:08 AM

You give me food for thought and inspiration for new paths to take.I've published some haikus with concrete images, I think, here.

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