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it often feels as though life gathers stones upon puerile sand rising toward hubris ever further from the source …fragile as innocence 11 May 2020 Contest: Flow With The Collum Lune Sponsor: Nette Onclaud Visual: 2

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Line Gauthier

Date: 4/8/2021 9:46:00 PM

lovely, David ~

Jeanne Mcgee

Date: 5/24/2020 7:27:00 AM

Love the last line...congrats on your top win.

Sam Kauffman

Date: 5/14/2020 2:37:00 PM

David, congratulations to you on your top placement in Nette's contest. Outstanding line, your conclusion, "fragile as innocence."

John Lawless

Date: 5/14/2020 8:11:00 AM

But mostly we skip this flat ones across the smooth surface of life's pond. Great take on the stones David

Eve Roper

Date: 5/13/2020 11:03:00 PM

David, congratulations on your win in Nette's contest. Hugs Eve

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 5/13/2020 8:14:00 PM

Love this and especially when I remember the visual! Cool! Congratulations on first place, David!

Suzanne Delaney

Date: 5/13/2020 6:47:00 PM

Congratulations David...some great lines and a well deserved win in Nette’s contest.nSuZ

Mohan Chutani

Date: 5/13/2020 6:38:00 PM

David, wonderful description of life..fragile as innocence. Congrats. Mohan

Paul Callus

Date: 5/13/2020 1:18:00 PM

This is a beautiful, creative take on the visual you chose, David! Congratulations on placing first! Regards // paul

Aditi Mishra

Date: 5/13/2020 12:03:00 PM

Such a simple smooth flow of emotions :) Congratulations on your deserving win!

Tom Cunningham

Date: 5/12/2020 3:59:00 AM

Like your interpretation of the stones David, the first one I've seen with visual 2. Good luck Tom