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London 2000

Cellophane wrappers tossed aside Street worn Dark tide. Dashiki dressed strode in pride Street worn Dark tide. Refuse strewn …side laced Street waste Dark tide. Dirty white, short height, left faced; Street waste Light tide. Blighted boughs, deformed, reformed Street waste Light tide. Diverse, rich cream, seamed……… Street dreamed New tide.

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Ian Petch

Date: 12/22/2008 4:55:00 PM

This poem captures quite well the same feeling I got from being in London: hopelessly hopeful :P ...nice work =) I tend not to punctuate too much in my own poetry anyways, though I should probably change that. My soul evolves, but my writing skills seem to be getting left behind :P Thanks for reading anyways.

Raul Moreno

Date: 12/17/2008 1:48:00 PM

My first stanza is two sentences, a preference of mine. Punctuating and grammar are the poet's discretion. There really isn't any set rules to follow in poetry in the structure of a sentence. I advise do what feels good for you in the form of your choice. Thanks for your comments.