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Hypnotic Eyes

you looked at me connected looked away ~ i waited you looked again The Way You Look At Me" Poetry Contest Sponsored by: JCB Brul Syllable counter PS 17. 02/05/2021

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Line Gauthier

Date: 5/4/2021 7:28:00 AM

I love the story you created here ~ beautifully done, David

David Kavanagh
Date: 5/5/2021 2:37:00 AM

Heya Line, a little teasing match or indeed something much stronger, than you for looking in, cheers David

Alexis Y.

Date: 5/4/2021 3:53:00 AM

Hi David, I found this to be deep and romantic! Congratulations on your win. It was well deserved. Have a great day.

David Kavanagh
Date: 5/4/2021 4:15:00 AM

Thank you Alexis it is very deep, maybe I over simplified the moment, but I’m delighted you get it, and took time to comment, cheers David

Christopher Flaherty

Date: 5/3/2021 4:26:00 PM

Back of the net Still got it

David Kavanagh
Date: 5/4/2021 2:02:00 AM

Whoa there, lol, some might just be teasing, still must tread carefully

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/3/2021 2:41:00 PM

the "looking back" it's SO nice!!!

David Kavanagh
Date: 5/3/2021 3:14:00 PM

Isn’t it just Andrea, teasing, tempting, and reassuring, cheers David

Rico Leffanta

Date: 5/3/2021 12:31:00 PM

Reminds me of an hillbilly song, "I was looking back to see if you were looking back to see if I was looking back to see if you were looking back at me" ......Aloha! Rico

Rico Leffanta
Date: 5/4/2021 11:41:00 AM

The rest of the verse, "You were cute as you could be, standing looking back at me, and it was plain to see, I'd enjoy your company!" Hillbilly song, but the French have mastered the act! Congratulations on your win! Aloha! Rico

David Kavanagh
Date: 5/3/2021 12:36:00 PM

Ha lol, I don’t know that one Rico, but sounds about right, if we don’t keep looking, someone else sure as hell will, cheers David

Beryl Edmonds

Date: 5/3/2021 11:37:00 AM

It’s that second glance that leads to romance. A super Monoku David... Belle

David Kavanagh
Date: 5/3/2021 12:30:00 PM

Heya Belle, yes indeed that moment can last a lifetime, cheers David

Jenna Logan

Date: 5/2/2021 3:19:00 PM

That second look tells the story. Soup mail for you.

David Kavanagh
Date: 5/3/2021 12:57:00 AM

Indeed it does Jenna, the moment writes the narrative, my mail box is having a non responsive moment, will try again in a bit, cheers David

Jan Allison

Date: 5/2/2021 2:59:00 PM

.... and what happened next!! :-) you captured this moment brilliantly David:-) hugs Jan xx

Jan Allison
Date: 5/3/2021 3:52:00 AM

That is so lovely to know David, she is a lucky lady indeed:-) hugs jan xx

David Kavanagh
Date: 5/2/2021 3:07:00 PM

Well now Jan lets just say, I’m still married to one of those moments, the others may well still be playing out in an alternate universe, cheers David

Sotto Poet

Date: 5/2/2021 2:40:00 PM

Very well penned Moniku David, but I think most people don’t have trouble with focusing. They have trouble with deciding. Have a great evening, my friend

David Kavanagh
Date: 5/2/2021 2:59:00 PM

Ah choice Lasaad, humanities greatest strength and weakness, this one is more about that inexplicable moment of mutual attraction, what comes after is anyone’s guess, cheers David

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 5/2/2021 2:21:00 PM

That is a stunning moment :)

David Kavanagh
Date: 5/2/2021 2:31:00 PM

Thanks Kim It is a fantastic feeling of attraction reciprocated, cheers David