Humpty Dumpty

Enjoyed reading your poem this evening. I get heartburn just listening to the media. I feel sorry for our eastern folks but feel the western folks should not get involved in this. Sometimes humpty dumpty must fall. God Bless Phyl

Excellent point, Justin! But I do think that a lot of people on the right and left genuinely and principley oppose intervention when it is not in our national interests. But your point strikes a poignant note, because the uninformed majority are easily swayed by the opinions of the media elite!

This says a lot about how news is consumed, but the anger and the revolt demonstrates how sheer democratic passion cant be contained

Thanks for your kind words and incisive criticism. Shocking is a necessary to illustrate the fact that the rulers were caught off guard! Jolt describes the impact of the severity of the shock. In the second line, change is the complementary component of generosity (unleashed coffers). Colt is capatalized because it is a type of revolver! But I do agree that concision would give the poem more rythm!

Just as Humpty Dumpty, many of these Mideast nations are experiencing a "great fall," Stephen. The heartburn that hurts the worst is the thought of Western nations getting involved in these revolts. Well said. Best wishes, Carolyn

Hi Stephen. A very nice write, but it would be much improved by a bit of pruning, which would not takeaway from your intention: S1, L2: omit ~ shocking / S1, L3: omit ~ change / S1, L4: colt ( c ~lower case) / s2, L1: add a 1 syllable word, 'boil' perhaps, after frizzle / S2, L3: omit ~ slowly / S2, L4: omit ~ do. Now see how it scans, it should read much smoother. Thank you for sharing.