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Those primeval skies, no man ever knew Ignited, as one massive boulder burst through Hollow inside, creatures not unlike mice Strapped themselves in as they plunged into ice Instantly boiled then instantly frozen None were to question the planet they'd chosen An epoch asleep in an Antarctic crater They wake in the hand of a land excavator   Wires in their heads which meant sleeping was learning Now are removed for their species’ returning Unsure if their human descendants mean ill Each crushes down on their dormancy pill   Caused quite a stir in the British museum When people queued up just to go in and see ’em The sensor that said they’re alive was deemed broke Those ‘mice’ didn’t move if you gave ’em a poke Somebody called it an obvious joke Well, that’s what was said... until one of them spoke.   Scientists, stunned at this verbal ability Whisked them away to a secret facility This is the plan said a government man Slice them and dice them and learn what you can   An autopsy planned for these intriguing visitors Saw scalpels laid out by intrigued inquisitors One Scientist shunned this inhuman insanity Smuggled them out in the name of humanity   Soon, at his door, one hell of a din ‘Quick: in the bread bin!’ The door caved in Soldiers with carbines invaded his space The one with the stripes stuck a gun in his face Handover the creatures, you know what we mean Or you’ll disappear, never more to be seen A brief muffled sound from inside the bread bin A soldier stepped forward and took a look in   His accent akin to an east London geezer ‘Here Sarge, dey’ve dug an ’ole down to da freeza’  He reached for the freezer and opened the door Instantly frozen he crashed to the floor Out from the freezer three frosty mice jumped An icy blue beam and the soldiers all slumped Each frozen solid before they were down  They fractured then shattered and scattered the ground   The Doc stared aghast and said, ‘What kind of mice shoot laser beams that turn men into ice? And what’s with the freezer that you hid inside  How, when you came out you appeared fortified.’   One mouse stepped forward, ‘We’re grateful to you, But don’t call us mouse, for we three are shrew. Those eons ago, what we never knew Was sooner or later we’d turn into you My team here were watchmen, the ice kept us true In our world we’d freeze and our strength would renew. But we must be gone now and you should come too For soon other forces will seek us... and you We’ll need your assistance if we’re to survive And we’ll need a freezer to keep us alive   The scientist said, ‘A house owned by my mother was left to myself and my sister and brother, but they went off traveling some place or other, could be the place we could go undercover.’ The shrew said, ‘We knew you would know what to do, so maybe we’ll leave all the driving to you  but we’re gonna need an apartment or ‘flat’ so bring us that bread bin: that's well cosy, that.’   The scientist said, ‘Well that seems like a plan, do you all have names, I’m Stanley Dann.’ ‘Churchill, Crocket and Cody,’ one said, ‘and it’s thanks to you that we are not dead.’ Doctor Dann said, ‘They’ll call further resources, but what did you mean when you said “Other forces”?’ Churchill said, ‘Doctor, I must keep this brief, they’ll follow us here and there will be grief. We’d come to be Earth’s first mammalian creature, but in hot pursuit was our foe: Catonita.’ CHAPTER TWO CATONITA The car took a corner on four squealing tyres In frantic evasion of rampaging fires That sprang up wherever the beast laid a foot And the doc fled the town on a highway of soot ‘What the hell is it, it looks like a cat, but I never saw a cat bigger than that.’ ‘Doctor,’ said Cody, ‘can you take the truth? that’s the forerunner of your Sabre Tooth.’ Dann checked his mirror and rammed his foot down, ‘So some Goddamned fossil is torching my town?’ The Doc watched the devil cat stop, stand and stare He knew that they’d come face to face again… somewhere * The hideaway house with the freezer on ‘Fast’ Was revitalising the blast from the past A very large whisky, no water, no ice Was not helping Stanley Dann feel very nice He swung the door open and bellowed inside ‘Just what the hell’s going on?’ he cried Crocket stepped out and he shook off the frost, ‘We are here to help, whatever the cost’ ‘The Catonita has the wind in its sails, and when she seeks vengeance, she always prevails’ Doctor Dann gulped down his whisky then wailed, ‘What kind of feline is that multi tailed?’ ‘She’s called Catonita: a cat of nine tails, in every encounter she’ll survive nine fails, each time she dies she loses a tail and only with none, Catonita may fail.’ Dann gasped. ‘We must kill her again and again?’ And Cody said, ‘Only on ten is she slain. When all tails are gone, you must kill her again and only then have you ended her reign. But, there’s fire in her paws and she’s tall as a man And there’s darts in her tails that spread out like a fan But harmless if tail-less? That, I must debunk, think rear guard and nerve gas, then think like a skunk.’ The scientist said, ‘In this world full of kooks, nothing can fend off a fistful of nukes.’ But Crocket’s wry grin gave the doctor a hunch that Catonita ate missiles for lunch. ‘So how do you reckon, with three four inch mice, I’m gonna put that massive moggie on ice?’ Churchill said, ‘Okay lads, let’s let him see, Advance evolution on my count of three.’ Well, Stanley Dann didn’t know what to expect but frankly it wasn’t quite what happened next All three clicked their ‘fingers’ and rapidly grew, each one becoming a full, man-sized, shrew. With many more weapons than they’d had before Cody said, ‘Okay, Doc… let’s go to war.’

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Date: 1/16/2022 4:14:00 AM
This would be a GREAT idea for "Men In Black- 4 (lol) Love this, Terry. It kept me intrigued the entire way through. Awesome write... Charlie
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Date: 1/16/2022 10:38:00 AM
Well if one of the studios should call, I’d gladly accept used notes of any denomination. I won’t buy the villa in the Alps just yet though. Cheers, Charles. Thanks for your enthusiastic comment. Terry
Date: 1/14/2022 4:02:00 AM
Well I know what planet you where on writing this epic Terry, it could only come from an earthling with incredible imagination, and I see you wanted to keep going for a third chapter, I agree with Andrea this story could probably sell as a serial in Hollywood with the right contacts, brilliant animation and creativity, cheers David
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Date: 1/14/2022 11:55:00 AM
Thanks, David. I think we all have a few of our own poems that we feel are a cut above and which we wish could be wider read. Alas, the price of increasing length is decreasing readership, but hey, the comments here have been exuberant so I’m mightily chuffed. Yes, I do think Hollywood could work wonders… But, No, I won’t offer to do the artwork! Ha Ha! Terry
Date: 1/13/2022 1:12:00 PM
Talk about an imagination. Wow, you could probably sell an idea like this to Hollywood!!! I liked also that nine tail allusion!!
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Date: 1/13/2022 2:12:00 PM
Thanks, Andrea. I could actually see this whole thing as an animated (or even live action) production and would be properly chuffed… something is telling me not to hold my breath though. Really glad you enjoyed this and I’m more than grateful that you read the whole thing. Terry
Date: 1/12/2022 10:35:00 AM
I am sure your cat of nine tails instantly drew Kim Jong-Un's attention! Enjoyed! You have been a busy boy! Aloha!
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Date: 1/14/2022 11:42:00 AM
Best clarify that remark as I don’t live under a rock. I HAVE heard of Kim Jong-doodah… I HADN’T heard of the nine tails thing.
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Date: 1/13/2022 4:42:00 PM
Too honest for your own good, Rico. I hadn’t heard of Kim Jong-wotsit and a nine tailed anything, so rest easy. Terry
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Date: 1/13/2022 10:14:00 AM
Just realised it is the 9-tailed fox for Kim Jong-Un, but enjoyed just the same! Aloha!
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Date: 1/12/2022 2:48:00 PM
Glad you enjoyed this, Rico. Worked on this off and on for a while now. Always intended a third chapter but taking a leaf out of one of those Winston Churchill films I decided to end it at the ‘declaration of war’ stage. Otherwise, I have no idea how long it would have got. Terry
Date: 1/12/2022 8:36:00 AM
Well this is brilliant Terry, cheered me up no end. Been for covid test awaiting results, doc given me antibiotics, don't think it's covid but just a precautionary measure. Got a terrible cough, going hot and cold. Tom
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Date: 1/12/2022 2:52:00 PM
Certainly hope you come up negative, Tom. I wouldn’t worry about going hot and cold… it just means you’re a typical girlfriend… ha ha! Seriously, hope you feel better soon. Glad you enjoyed this. Terry.
Date: 1/11/2022 5:31:00 PM
Terry, this is an absolutely delightful epic! I enjoyed it immensely, and the ending quatrain was absolutely perfect! Good stuff, my friend!
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Date: 1/11/2022 5:41:00 PM
Wow… I’m flattered that you read this mega write. I know these lengthy poems can be daunting at first sight and I confess to skipping some myself in the past. Sometimes though, a story gets under your skin and you just wanna write it… even if no one reads it. I’d love to have written ‘Chapter three - The War’, but one has to draw the line somewhere. And, of course… sometimes, less is more. Welcome back. Terry