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Fighting Sharks-Draft 2

verse 1

Mr Nice Man
nice disguise at the front
just like your own paintings
blur the edges
just like Salvador.

verse 2

Promising prizes
not like the wisest
dont act like you care
Predator.

Chorus

your floating in the wrong seas
your fighting me for what for
your hunting for the wrong things
all like Salvador.

Chorus 2

Your fighting in the wrong seas
hunting for the wrong things
up side down, wrong way round
just like Salvador.

Bridge verse

Your drowning in the blue seas
and the pictures getting clearer
upside down and counting
whats the hunting for.

lyric builder in progress- Draft 2

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Tom Woody

Date: 12/31/2024 6:05:00 AM

This one's a bit darker, edgier. What's he hunting for? What's his goal, his motive, this shark of yours. Time will tell

Jacqueline Elston
Date: 12/31/2024 6:24:00 AM

yes its turning out darker. i'm brainstorming ideas before l make each of the line verses lyrical and match bar counts, which will come much later. At moment just seeing where the lyric building goes, wish me luck lol. J