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Author's Notes: "Death and Forlorn Time in the Shadows of True Evil" is a Quintain-style poem that I had co-authored in close collaboration with my very talented colleague, Liam McDaid. In this Horror-Fantasy write, which is the first one of these we've mutually done in a while, we wanted to consider a motif predicated upon the abstract notions of "Death" and "Time" as they could be applied in a fantasy-metaphor concerning the "shadows of true evil," which, of course, find their related origins of mischief, terror, and evil-doings against all of Mankind in the hands of Lucifer himself—The Great Tempter of Mankind!! We both worked diligently to develop some interesting metaphoric-images for each of the four Quintain stanzas in this write. We also wanted to release this one now, before arriving too close to the start of the Christmas season since the Halloween season has already passed us by. Enjoy!! (Gary Bateman – November 24, 2017) (Quintain)

Categories: dark, evil, fantasy, horror, metaphor, myth, and symbolism. 

Death and Forlorn Time in the Shadows of True Evil Death and Time holdeth onto eerie and most frightening shadows Whilst pervading deeply within that infernal region where the dark Evil and uncanny mists occlude the terrifying presence of a great Dark Doomsday cult of vicious and horrifying beasts that are now Perpetuated from a putrid Hellspawn by Lucifer’s own command! Corrupted with the presence of sacrilegious beasts of true violence Who hate all aspects of humankind with their spirit of maleficence, And wince not whilst decapitating the heads of those who disagree With them, and creating a mindless havoc of unparalleled tragedy That’s become an expected, sad occurrence of Mankind writ large! Brandishing a razor-sharp, coal-black-blade is their evil incarnation, Of a time, that’s totally indicative of their chaotic rampage of bloody Burning attacks as battlegrounds are drawn into an eternal darkness, From whence there may be no return since there’s a dark, blood-red Poison, from the dark afterlife, in which every drop of blood is toxic! Every drop of this spilt blood-red poison has a deadly demonic aroma, That produces nasty swarms of ravenous locusts to torment all innocent Victims caught between the machinations of Almighty God and Lucifer. In this reality, these evil spirits cast their malevolent spells without any Scruple, wishing for Mankind’s swift destruction by Lucifer himself! Gary Bateman and Liam McDaid – A Collaborated Poem, Copyright © All Rights Reserved – November 24, 2017 (Quintain)

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Date: 11/27/2017 5:44:00 AM
A great depiction of Lucifer and his many armies of darkness...a hellish write, just the way I like it...well-done boys...^WW^
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Gary Bateman
Date: 11/27/2017 8:38:00 AM
WW, Many Thanks to you from both Liam and me!! We're both quite enthused that you liked our Quintain, and our depiction of "Lucifer." Cheers and Best, Gary
Date: 11/26/2017 5:33:00 AM
Hey Gary took me several attempts to comment on this.. I do not know why.. Great dark and gothic collaboration with Liam, who is a wonderful poet.. You create vivid imagery through your words and you are right many are distracted by Lucifer, even those who preach sacred verses, yet to not practice what they preach...
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Gary Bateman
Date: 11/26/2017 7:03:00 PM
Thanks Silent One!! I always appreciate your comments and prescient observations. And, yes, you're right for sure with everything you say. Lucifer is the Great Tempter of Mankind. Many prelates talk and give lip service, but don't always practice what they preach. Your words are spot-on!! Best Wishes, Gary
Date: 11/24/2017 5:46:00 PM
Excellent Kull the Conqueror dark light write, Gary and Liam. Love the medieval language and Gothic imagery. Wonderfully spirited (pun intended) collab by two talented poets. Keep 'em coming, alight (all right) ... make the darkness bend to the light. Mighty fine poetry the twin pens. Love and peace always.
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Gary Bateman
Date: 11/25/2017 9:06:00 AM
Ah . . . Hello Freddie!! Thanks, as always, for your read and great insightful comments!! Methinks the olde medieval and Gothic imagery give this one the right touch. Liam and I are always very good at blending together just the right touch and nuance on writes like this. YES!! We must always endeavor to make "Darkness bend to the light." Enough of all of the darkness and gloom!! Cheers and Best, Gary
Date: 11/24/2017 1:50:00 PM
Love dark Gothic writes, well done and amazing collab!!
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Gary Bateman
Date: 11/24/2017 2:06:00 PM
Hello Arthur, See My Earlier Comment Below -- Ditto!! It still applies!! Cheers and Best, Gary
Date: 11/24/2017 1:49:00 PM
Love dark Gothic writes, well done and amazing collab!!
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Gary Bateman
Date: 11/24/2017 2:05:00 PM
Hello Arthur, This means that my and Liam's work is a Double-Masterpiece!! LOL!! Thanks as always for your read and comments. Dark Gothic Writes are always fun. Methinks the Spirit of None Other Than "Goethe" possessed both of us during our collab on this grand poetic effort!! Best Always, Gary
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 11/24/2017 1:50:00 PM
ops, somehow shows twice! I guess cause it was collab LOL
Date: 11/24/2017 12:09:00 PM
Dark write with a razor-sharp bite! Loved it..a true favorite now..congratulations to you both on an excellent collaboration...:-)
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Gary Bateman
Date: 11/24/2017 12:22:00 PM
Thanks Donna very much!! I know that Liam, just as I do, always greatly appreciates your comments. And thanks also for the FAVE honor bestowed by you on our collaborated work here. With Best Wishes . . . Gary
Date: 11/24/2017 7:44:00 AM
Dark truths presented with mastery by two wonderful poets and friends: Gary and Liam, Liam and Gary! How evil the evil can be and how dark the darkness we may never know but we understand it in the degree we have lived it and experienced it in ourselves and others! Profound and powerful!
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Gary Bateman
Date: 11/24/2017 12:19:00 PM
Thanks Demetrios on behalf of both Liam and I, for your very insightful read and thoughts on our latest collaborated effort. Evil and Darkness comes to all of us as human beings under many different guises and in exceptional circumstances. The thing for all of us is to keep in mind is that long-held beliefs by any of us may, in fact, be challenged on occasion by negative forces unbeknownst to us. Cheers and Best, Gary
Date: 11/24/2017 6:50:00 AM
Kudos to you Gary and Liam--you depicted the presence of evil well--the ending line foretells an unpleasant eventuality.
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Gary Bateman
Date: 11/24/2017 7:02:00 AM
Thanks Vijay for your read here and kind comments. I know that Liam is equally pleased as well!! Let us all hope and pray that "Lucifer" is indeed "unsuccessful" in his ultimate goals and efforts. The presence of this type of evil has been with all of us since the beginning of mankind's existence. Regardless, I'm an eternal optimist in the end!! Best Always, Gary
Date: 11/24/2017 5:32:00 AM
My goodness Gary and Liam, this is certainly a deep, dark and foreboding write filled with metaphors of the state of the planet as it is. A fetor pervades our planet in all walks of society and many countries as we speak - starting from the top - But,' fear ye not' should we - not acknowledge the negative one, and remain connected to the All Seeing and Powerful Energy of the Universe, good will trump the thermal undercurrent of the negative one. A most clever and impassioned seamless Quintain series unveiling the metaphysical dangers we face - The image so suitable to the theme...Maria PS it quite a coincidence that you chose the same topic - as I did in my 'My Immortal' - but with a different theme.
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Gary Bateman
Date: 11/24/2017 6:40:00 AM
Hello Maria!! Thank you very much for your very detailed and most thoughtful observation and comment on my and Liam's latest co-write here. "My Immortal" is certainly at the top of my list here later to read -- and I do look forward to reading it very much. This is actually quite interesting indeed that our themes are of like coincidence. "Death and Forlorn" was and is a schematic-theme that Liam and I had been exchanging some notes on over the four months or so. Like all complex writes like this one, everything seems to come together into a proper fruition of efforts in the end. I'm very pleased you liked our co-write here, as I know Liam is too!! I should be getting to "My Immortal" (I promise) before the end of the day. This is a very unique coincidence of topics indeed. Maybe its a type of shared Karma of sorts among you, Liam, and me. Why not, eh?? Cheers and Best, Gary
Date: 11/24/2017 5:16:00 AM
love how this turned out gary digging up the ghosts from behind shadows underneath the carpet of darkness your pen flowed silver lining beautiful always a pleasure sharing a canvas with you pal wishing you both a blessed weekend
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Gary Bateman
Date: 11/24/2017 6:25:00 AM
Hello Liam, My Great Irish Mate!! Methinks the ye olde "Irish Dew" may floweth freely this evening in celebration of this one finally getting completed given that our original draft notes had to sit for a while. Yes, for sure, always a distinct pleasure to shareth a poetic canvas with you. Methinks too that the Leprechauns and my Irish ancestors will be a bit smilin' with this new Quintain of ours!! Best of Luck be with you always and with your family too!! Gary
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Maria Williams
Date: 11/24/2017 5:39:00 AM
A great seamless write Liam and Gary. Please see my comments above...Maria

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