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Deadly Mistake

trip and splash teeth take advantage and sink flock must flee

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Scott Thirtyseven

Date: 11/13/2013 11:54:00 PM

Of course. I think I was pretty slow on this one. But when the penny dropped, I was impressed. Well done.

Keith Bickerstaffe

Date: 11/11/2013 4:32:00 PM

Splendid 3/7/3 HAIKU! Your use of alliterations is duly noted... and applauded!!! Best wishes, Keith

Kj Force

Date: 10/22/2013 8:14:00 PM

Whoa..that was awesome.."gators delite"

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 10/22/2013 8:18:00 PM

Exactly what I was getting at kj!! Thanks for the comment. :) ~Laura

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 9/15/2013 5:10:00 AM

I ENJOYED THE VISION DRAWN

Duke Beaufort

Date: 9/7/2013 9:25:00 AM

I have to ask what inspired this? Anyway, I thank you for being here, for your comments and for your wisdom.

Honestly J.T.

Date: 9/4/2013 3:48:00 PM

I got the picture of wolves attacking sheep. Good poem

John Loving Iii

Date: 9/2/2013 8:55:00 PM

A true haiku.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 9/2/2013 5:43:00 PM

Hi Laura, ha just knowing makes me nerves. I am guilty, of making such mistakes. Hate myself sometimes.. anyways, off the haiku subject... enjoyed, seems as if someone really screwed up, ..panic rush... xool...PD

Poet Tacito

Date: 9/2/2013 4:51:00 PM

Fierce and, dare I say, biting. :) Awesome job here!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 9/2/2013 3:18:00 PM

- Unique, haiku Laura! - Well done ! - @ -(You're so beautiful, love your photo) - oxox // Anne-Lise :)