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Bar Scene

After nightfall I hear the loud rumbling mufflers of youth
On their way to the hottest popular downtown nightclubs
Where they imbibe too much, dancing, cruising the night away
After midnight, the sotted fellows become more uncouth
Some girls pair up for safety’s sake and hail a waiting cab
A few hover with drinks in a carefully concealed booth
Waiting for a boy, a set of keys, to stagger over
Let them take advantage of his inexperienced youth
Did they spot earlier, ignored, one of those boorish chubs
Cruising the night away, where they imbibe too much, dancing
Slip away late in the morning like a successful sleuth.


Written March 18, 2021
Using abRacadabRa rhyme scheme
14-syllable per line

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Caren Krutsinger

Date: 3/24/2021 12:23:00 AM

I am so relieved at this part "Some girls pair up for safety’s sake and hail a waiting cab" I was picturing them all driving drunk until I got to it.

L Milton Hankins
Date: 3/24/2021 8:47:00 AM

I hear you, Caren, but it's a pretty accurate picture of the bar scene; well, as it used to be before COVID. This poem was prompted by the loud sound of a muffler going down my street about 11:00pm! Thanks for reading my poem.