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The elderly Elmer Brown dwelled alone, like a solitary tree on a hill, Loving quiet, glazed life still, in burgundy, sunset moments of until. A widower, Elmer Brown had generations of offspring, living far away, Feeling fresh, foreign breezes, in fruitful terrains, younger than today. Though retired, Elmer had his hobbies, which gave much satisfaction; Like a storm of sudden, scathing terror, afore a red hot sun reaction. Elmer's friends told tales, of truth and fiction; like dream chronicles. They found time for pool and sports, and arguing over news articles. Fumed flower fields of fantasy, aflame in red, greeted family calling; For the first time since last seen, like a suddenly perceived longing. Elmer lived in the house of glad leisure, like yellow sunshine siestas; Or the lazy clouds of slow motion, heading for the dusky, red deltas. Orange or green sailboats could be seen, from his street like confetti, With colors from somewhere, everywhere about, looking very pretty. Noisemakers hit a happy note, with neighbors on the Fourth of July, Who nibbled on many niceties, unaware of instant time, twinkling by. 'Crimson star' flowers glittered red, as wild strawberry days on Mars, And 'stars and stripes' blooms swore allegiance, despite stormy scars. 'Twitter' scent was left on social media, like a giddy deja vu encounter, When 'red rim' plants lived life on the edge, like peril's only daughter. Elmer indulged his hobby of cabinetry, on a stormy evening like today. He firmly attached it to his wall; then only had to get the pulls to stay. But, he bent to retrieve his dropped tool, then carelessly stood rapidly; And banged his head on the new cabinet. The work ended unhappily! He'd had his supper, so he was soon to bed, while silvery rain deluged; And Elmer snored like a foghorn, until sunlit, rosy dawn's pastel hues. Still sore that summer morning, Elmer took a day off from everything, Except for needed rest and reading, as life, like colors, is ever varying! How Elmer's tale got told is still mystery, like so many nursery rhymes; Still loved by generations of children, lending wonder to modern times! 'It's raining, it's pouring. The old man is snoring. He bumped his head and went to bed And he couldn't get up in the morning. It's raining, it's pouring. The old man is snoring. He bumped his head and went to bed And he couldn't get up in the morning.'

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Date: 5/19/2025 9:08:00 AM
Elmer strikes a chord. Still have some amnesia. Delightful poem as usual. Your nursery rhymes always a pleasure to read.
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Evelyn Judy Buehler
Date: 5/19/2025 9:50:00 AM
Thank you for the delight of your comment. I do hope your health is better soon. hugs :)
Date: 5/17/2025 3:31:00 PM
Wow Evelyn, I loved reading this and had no idea that the end lines would surprise me so much! I will never think on that children's poem without remembering Elmer! What a sweet write your pen has delighted me with! <3
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Evelyn Judy Buehler
Date: 5/17/2025 9:26:00 PM
Your remarks make me feel wonderful, BJ, because it's been my desire to put stories behind the beloved nursery rhymes. I'm so glad that you find this one to be memorable and delightful. Very best wishes. :)
Date: 5/17/2025 10:18:00 AM
I enjoyed reading your write/story. Great Ending... Have a blessed/wonderful day writing away.............
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Evelyn Judy Buehler
Date: 5/17/2025 9:19:00 PM
Your pleasure in this tale is my delight. Thanks so much, Paula. Enjoy your weekend. :)
Date: 5/17/2025 4:24:00 AM
very interesting person, and portrait to be remembered, something strange happens to anyone getting old, enjoyed your poem
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Evelyn Judy Buehler
Date: 5/17/2025 9:15:00 PM
I'm so glad you found this poem to be interesting and memorable, Yann. Thank you for the pleasure of your gratifying remarks. :)
Date: 5/16/2025 8:06:00 PM
A sharing of imagination that held me from top to bottom. The song, Evelyn ... oh my gosh, just realized I don't remember if 3 & 4 lines are the real ones, and I should recall, I sang it often growing up. WOW, I don't remember. BUT, I do remember that your story was a great telling of how a nursery rhyme came to be. God gave you a fertile imagination and I feel sure that sharing it is what He wanted you to do. Forgive my mini freak, I've had some brain issues, so I got scared. CayCay
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CayCay Jennings
Date: 5/17/2025 10:57:00 PM
I shouldn't have used the word scared, concerned would have better served. I'm not scared because I know He's got me, my jobs is to walk into it with faith, be receptive to all growth purposed within (for me & others.) Just recently, I have forgotten things (spellings, definitions, a number I had just looked at), so I thought, what? now it's song lines we're tossing? Thank you for touching me with hopes and blessings. (As you know from my Hair poem, I've still got my sense of humor!) LOVE
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Evelyn Judy Buehler
Date: 5/17/2025 9:05:00 PM
Dear CayCay, thank you so much for your kind words, which bring joy to my heart. I am sorry to hear of your brain issues, and I dearly hope that you soon enjoy the best of health. Blessings.

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