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Written: May 19, 2024, For Hilo Poet Contest ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I hear achoo Two sniffle snore kids germs flu stuffy nose, sore Ooze rush home clean to bore Nero burned Rome Outcried poems too built brass dome

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Tonye George

Date: 5/23/2024 7:07:00 PM

Loved the rhymes. Fewer words make the best of them. Cheers.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 5/21/2024 1:42:00 PM

I faintly remember when he did that. LOL..Thanks for sharing this one with us. Reads like a good contender to me. Way to go. Sara K

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 5/20/2024 11:46:00 PM

Et tu, interesting thoughts. Clever with a bit of humor.

Duke Beaufort

Date: 5/20/2024 4:55:00 PM

SP, you're making me relate the flue with Rome on fire. Too funny really. Love it! Odd connections are often very inspiring

Buhagiar Victor

Date: 5/20/2024 11:44:00 AM

I see this is for the contest. Consider it free verse. Well composed. Great talent to write even short poems. Best for a win.

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 5/20/2024 5:22:00 AM

Hello Sotto, What a clever and concise snapshot of the chaos of germs and flu season. The rhyming scheme adds a playful rhythm to the piece, and your ability to capture the essence of a common nuisance in such few words is truly impressive. Well done! Good Luck! - Blessings, Daniel

Vijay Pandit

Date: 5/20/2024 5:03:00 AM

Very creatively done, my friend. You always write winners, Lasaad.

Ink Empress

Date: 5/20/2024 1:29:00 AM

Ah dr sotto is there any form or prompt that you cant do really! Youve done a very unique and clever take on this form, i havent really looked at the contest details yet but im sure you did it very well and delivered one that made me smile as i read the wordplay too! Especially the opening line is so clever! Hah! And the way youv used wordplay here is so fittinh for the theme that youv gone for! Excellent! Pleasure reading your work always! Best wishes for the contest! Keep shining

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 5/19/2024 4:42:00 PM

looks like a contest winner to me! Pretty clever and creative! Best wishes with the contest, dear Sotto. Have a great evening, your poetess friend in Texas, Sara

Silent One

Date: 5/19/2024 9:58:00 AM

I am not sure about this contest as I have not seen the poet give any examples, however, your arrangement of words seems very good... Best of luck in the contest...

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 5/19/2024 9:44:00 AM

I enjoyed reading your creative "TOO" write with a great picture. It was nice to see a short one this time. "Good Luck" Have A Blessed Day Writing Away..........