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May- 19- 2024
Raining in Summer Poetry Contest
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Outside it has started to rain Sitting in my porch I watch, The elements mix and mingle Kneading the pulverized dust The drizzle has gained a sudden might And now it rains cats and dogs I hear the blowing wind’s violent howl This is summer rain, so unpredictable is its course I hear the rumble of thunder in rhythmic roll Watch trees casting leaves in the wind Specters of brown and yellow spiraling down And flown hither and thither Rain water sinks fast into the mud Promising new sprouts of green Sieving deeper into my mind Reviving faded dreams! I watch the race of truant clouds And how they collide on their track Breeding florescent light and rumbling sound Like a small firework in the sky I hear the rain all around Hold it in my palm Feel the thrill of the first firm grip of my love And my senses aglow with a soothing calm The droplets have once again begun falling thick and heavy They hit hard on the parched earth Lightning sends chills down my spine Darkness grows as if the day is dying out Fun to watch these raindrops flop and break Over boulders and flow downwards Raising the scent of roasted earth Mixing with the smell of fresh Jasmine _______________________ As I kept looking on, the rain grew weak And its rattle got suddenly stilled, Like a blasting music abruptly stopped Making the hall silent and leaving waves of thrill! The sky that peered through veils of grey, Beamed and brightened once again, With all its aches washed away, In the purging tears of crystal drops!

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Date: 5/23/2024 8:24:00 PM
Perfect imagery and metaphors dearest Valsa. The rain relaxes and stir us up. Comforts and makes us shiver. "The drizzle has gained a sudden might And now it rains cats and dogs I hear the blowing wind’s violent howl." As loud as drums.
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Date: 5/23/2024 11:07:00 AM
Dearest Valsa, I am just in awe of your expressive artistry that you paint on the canvass of this beauty of a poem! Every stanza overflows with images that tell of the magical transformation of the world in a summer rain - a sparkling fountain of words! There is something very special about rain in the summer - a plethora of unexpected blessings. I especially love the images in the first stanza! Best wishes for the contest. Blessings of a summer rain to you sweet friend.
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Date: 5/21/2024 7:37:00 AM
"The droplets have once again begun falling thick and heavy They hit hard on the parched earth Lightning sends chills down my spine Darkness grows as if the day is dying out" -- Wonderfully ominous! "The sky that peered through veils of grey, Beamed and brightened once again, With all its aches washed away, In the purging tears of crystal drops!" Lovely poetry. Have a blessed day my friend.
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Date: 5/20/2024 10:23:00 AM
enjoyed reading your wonderful write. What a great/fun picture. I love the summer rains. "Good Luck" We both did this one. Have A Blessed Day Writing Away.........
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Date: 5/20/2024 10:02:00 AM
I was enchanted and captivated with this poem dear Valsa. You have, with great poetic skill, captured so much for the senses to enjoy and immerse yourself into,’ thunder in rhythmic roll’ ‘ darkness grows as if the day is dying out’ ‘ purging tears of crystal drops’. Such wonderful imagery - you can sense the storm, hear it, feel it, through your vivid descriptive words. Loved reading this. Good luck in the contest. Hugs and blessings xx
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Date: 5/20/2024 1:01:00 AM
beautiful images, rain seems last and fall , a very observing and subtle poetry, enjoyed your brilliant universe
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Date: 5/19/2024 5:10:00 PM
subtle and beautiful words and images that so eloquently captured a summer rain. Your poems are soft yet powerfully magnificent in their delivery going from calm to storm and back again. I enjoyed your use of personification (sky that peered through veils of grey) as well as your rhyme scheme. You're a gifted writer with a special view of nature and life. Outstanding! Wishing you a wonderful evening, hugs, Sara
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Date: 5/19/2024 10:51:00 AM
Beautiful, being in the presence of the Almighty Living God, dwelling within and surrounding, how beautiful is your gift in writing to leave such a powerful message for all to seek: )
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Date: 5/19/2024 7:09:00 AM
Dear Valsa, what a description of summer rain. Here it's spring and still have some rain, but weak and short-lived. Your poem is a symphony of sounds, great imagery and lovely rhyme. Best for a win.
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Date: 5/19/2024 4:10:00 AM
Hey Valsa, I felt your poem vividly describes a summer rainstorm, capturing the intensity and beauty of the natural elements at play... The tone is reflective and appreciative, with a touch of awe for the power and beauty of nature. It shifts from calm observation to a sense of thrill and excitement as the storm intensifies, then back to calmness as the rain subsides. The progression from calm observation to intense experience and back to tranquility mirrors the cyclical patterns of nature and the mind's response to it.
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