Crystal Stars

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~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ 6:00 p.m. I step onto my driveway glancing toward the east, noticing the moon rising on the horizon. In every direction there is a star. “Should I fly into the universe?” I ask myself. “If so, in which direction? Any way would be the right way.” I tilt my head, gazing upward, eyes more open than they can be in the fullness of day, not looking at one star, yet somehow seeing them all at once. crystal stars pinned high dance amid the maze of light coloring the sky

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Shadow Hamilton

Date: 5/16/2024 7:00:00 AM

beautiful Sara I want to walk with stars as well hugs Sara

Vijay Pandit

Date: 5/16/2024 6:11:00 AM

Wonderful capture of the world above, Sara. Excellent hues of night imagery.

Sotto Poet

Date: 5/15/2024 7:12:00 PM

Well-crafted haibun is the sense of wonder and awe that is experienced when looking up at the night sky. Your word choice conveys a sense of wonder and contemplation. Phrases like "glancing toward the east," "noticing the moon rising on the horizon," and "crystal stars pinned high" paint vivid images of the night sky. The use of imagery and descriptive language helps to create a sense of awe and beauty, dear Sara.

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 5/16/2024 2:50:00 AM

Your comments were encouraging and validating, dear Sotto. I appreciate your thoughtfulness and thoroughness. Have a splendid Thursday, your poetess friend in Texas, Sar

Paige Hind

Date: 5/15/2024 5:27:00 PM

So beautiful- it must be a nice view, :)

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 5/16/2024 2:49:00 AM

yes, it is...nice part about living on the edge of our little town.