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Jack and Jill were brother and sister, whose environs were hilly and green; And they groomed horses and worked in gardens, oft 'til a moonlight scene. They did daily chores on a farm, in the outlying regions of Center Kingdom; Like collecting eggs and feeding their animals, under the varying sun prism. They swept the porch and milked goats, or harvested vegetables and fruits; Like the mad flight of lovely Esmeralda, when autumn colors were in pursuit! Their frisky friends were farmers' children from nearby, with a few far-flung; And they found favorite spots for flying kites, after hectic chores were done. A finer family could never be found, than fiercely devoted, Father and Mother, Always faithful to their forthright king, like cherry blossoms, sun smothered. They lived in the house of orange-pink sunrise, deep green, beauty blessed; For early rising became habit, like red blooms, magenta butterflies pressed. The pace was slower and very peaceful, along the pretty path to their door; And larks, finches and warblers played, prancing and singing musical scores. Nearest neighbors from the Jones farm, naturally visited with word of mouth, On nice, nectarine days without clouds, bearing nosegays, sunshine doused! Toothache blooms were receiving patients, and caring, bleeding hearts wept; As mountains align like stoic soldiers, in red realms, where no one has slept. Confetti colored fields bore celebration blooms, gravely honoring all sunsets; As shy, sensitive plants hid themselves away, from fervid sun's rouge regrets. Like many brothers, Jack at times teased Jill, as he did on the way up the hill; As he and Jill were fetching water; when summer bloomed, and birds trilled. Pupils at a parish school, Jill had forgot her lessons-Jack laughed and laughed. Jill saw scarlet rage, pushed Jack, then was aghast! Tensest moments passed! As the hill was steep, jesting Jack went flying, and Jill, too, lost her balance. Jack's head hit a rock and he lay still, as did Jill in amber noon, like a trance. A hill was no place for fighting. Poor Jill lost her temper, as sapphires rained; For jinxed by the heavy bucket, she fell too; and siblings lay in blooms' reign. Worried Mother and Father sought the children, and the missing crystal water, Frantic to find them both unconscious, a darling only son, and only daughter! For a long time, Jill was sore all over, while her brother, Jack was concussed. Both laid abed for weeks, mauve dawn to plum evening, when crickets fussed. They grew closer through shared convalescence, aware of their special bond; As love and caring replaced fighting, as if a fairy had waved her magic wand!

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Date: 5/12/2024 12:18:00 PM
What a wonderful story/write with a fun picture. Love This One. You could turn this into a book... Enjoy your day/week to come......
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Evelyn Judy Buehler
Date: 5/12/2024 8:38:00 PM
Your gracious comments are noted with great pleasure, Paula. Thank you very much. I hope you have a wonderful week.
Date: 5/6/2024 5:22:00 PM
Magical retelling Evelyn. I did a humorous retelling some years ago with audio, but yours is sublime. So talented
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Evelyn Judy Buehler
Date: 5/6/2024 9:37:00 PM
I'll bet your version was wonderful, Tom. Thank you for your delightful comments. :)
Date: 5/5/2024 9:24:00 AM
Nature takes prime place in your poems. I always look forward to your Saturday enchanting lyric. The imagery seems a photo from the Garden of Eden. Thoroughly enjoyed it.
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Evelyn Judy Buehler
Date: 5/5/2024 9:44:00 PM
I thoroughly enjoyed your comment, for which I offer my deep thanks. Your continuing support is a treasure. :)
Date: 5/4/2024 10:38:00 AM
Your poem paints a charming picture of Jack and Jill, siblings living a simple and idyllic life in the countryside. The imagery of their rural surroundings, with hills, greenery, and farms, creates a tranquil backdrop for their daily activities and adventures. The poem beautifully describes the siblings' close relationship with their family and community, emphasizing their bond with their parents and their interactions with neighbouring families.
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Evelyn Judy Buehler
Date: 5/4/2024 9:40:00 PM
Your delightful remarks are received with great pleasure. Thanks so much for your appreciation. ;)
Date: 5/4/2024 4:43:00 AM
Enjoyed the story, Evelyn. Your take on the theme brings to fore the saga of Jack and Jill, cleverly.
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Evelyn Judy Buehler
Date: 5/4/2024 9:38:00 PM
Thank you very much for your precious comment, Vijay. :)
Date: 5/3/2024 10:15:00 PM
Absolutely, a terrific poem. I love the rephrase of Jack & Jill. I don't know how you do it, but magical ink flows from your pen. I'll fave it.
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Evelyn Judy Buehler
Date: 5/4/2024 9:35:00 PM
Dear Hilda, your warm comments evoke inexpressible joy. It's so nice to know that my poetry is being enjoyed. Thank you very much for your kind words and your fave. :)

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