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jeffc
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11/17/2017 10:53:42 AM
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New to poetry
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Hello everyone, As the title says i'm new to poetry. I have no idea on form or anything resembling an understanding of properness, I have just been writing what comes out. So, I welcome your thoughts and insight
The Box
Herein this box I sit
Lamenting,gazing through the slits
Beingspass by in shadow form
Neveris it not the norm
Herein this box I stand
Holdingwalls with blood stained hands
Willit all come crashing down?
Wearingnothing but a frown
Herein this box I lay
Isit now the end of day?
Mytime has come and so will yours
Thisheart and soul have finally turned
Herein this box I now return
Fromwhence I came, to the dirt
Nowthis box I pass to you
Foryour heart and soul are like mine too
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11/17/2017 11:06:02 AM
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New to poetry
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Ok.. for some reason the first two words of every line got added together as one word.. not sure why or how that happened.
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11/17/2017 12:16:14 PM
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New Here
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Hello all. I'm new to this site and new to poetry. I don't really know much about writing poetry but I enjoy it. So I welcome you to read my poems and provide feedback. Thanks!
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11/17/2017 2:00:10 PM
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New Poem - Moonlight
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So, I'm new to this.. poetry stuff. I have written four poems in the past week and posted them on the site today. I'm putting this one here as it is my favorite so far and would appreciate some meaningful and honest feedback.
Moonlight
Beneath the moonlight silver shimmer Standing I begin to shiver Is there nothing more for me to do Than gaze upon this frozen ground
Behind me moonlight shadow cast Stretched out as memories fading fast Eyes shifting, scanning for a clue Left and right, but nothing found
Beyond the darkness moonlight gleams Revealing worlds beyond the seams Looking down and inward bound Panic rising when I hear the sound
Before the day moonlight stays Shining bright as I lay Snowflakes on my face do land Cold and still can't move my hand
From above moonlight shines Relieved, I close my eyes.
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11/22/2017 4:25:10 PM
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New Poem - Moonlight
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Do you feel that lines in the poem were written just to complete a rhyme? I have thick skin and am wanting to learn and improve
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