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Oscar Mascarenhas - all messages by user

5/30/2010 6:29:22 AM
Cold	Stranded on crossroads of two worlds at war, Yet you say the end is not close, Surrounded by angels and demons alike, I know not my friends or my foes, Shielding myself from the sparks of thy blades, Dreading but awaiting the Fall. Its grown so cold within me, Its grown so cold I cant breathe, Its grown so cold Memories are all thats left. Its grown so cold in and out, Its grown so cold I cant shout, Its grown so cold My Blood is turning ice. Light obstructed engulfed in the dark, Now broken my faith once was whole, Beseeching the life that was promised to me, When day turned to night as foretold, Trying so hard to resist all my fears, But into the abyss I Fall. Its grown so cold within me, Its grown so cold I cant breathe, Its grown so cold Memories are all thats left. Its grown so cold in and out, Its grown so cold I cant shout, Its grown so cold My Blood Is turning ice. This is a song which i penned. edited by Oscar Mascarenhas on 7/3/2010 edited by Oscar Mascarenhas on 7/3/2010
7/3/2010 12:09:28 AM
Cold	@ james, thank you for the comment. I hold it in high regards, I did not write this as a poem but a song, and I totally agree with you that not all songs are good poems and mine is definetly not a good poem, I was wrong to call it a lyric Now considering it to be a song and not a poem, could you please comment on it. thank you @ catie, thank you for your mark on my punctuations, im bad at it..... but im trying to improve....
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