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KIRAN NIVEDH - all messages by user

2/4/2019 10:20:14 AM
You are a beautiful song that rings in my heart	You are a beautiful song that rings in my heart You are the beautiful buzz that taps my chest My whole evening sky with the muse of hue dusk Only you and me in this world's musk You are my happiness my eyes search for You are the shadow of my soul When we clasp our hands Little madness starts to play Our love floats in the air Isn't this a lovely poem?
2/5/2019 10:18:01 AM
You are a beautiful song that rings in my heart	You are a beautiful song that rings in my heart You are the beautiful buzz that taps my chest My whole evening sky with the muse of hue dusk Only you and me in this world's musk You are my happiness my eyes search for You are the shadow of my soul When we clasp our hands Little madness starts to play Our love floats in the air Isn't this a lovely poem?
2/11/2019 8:01:43 AM
You are a beautiful song that rings in my heart	Thanks for your valuable comments
2/11/2019 8:11:30 AM
You are a beautiful song that rings in my heart	You are a beautiful song that rings in my heart You are the beautiful buzz that taps my chest My whole evening sky with you, my muse of the dusk! Only you and me in this world's musk You are my happiness my eyes search for You are the shadow of my soul When we clasp our hands Little madness starts to play Our love floats in the air Showing Aurora of us everywhere
5/12/2019 2:59:19 AM
need critique- poem name- missing you	Make me drunk with the jewelof your eyes I want to bloom like cottonand save me from this demise Still you are away from mewhole Seems to be lost my heart andsoul In one other’s arms you andme, Nostalgia is sweat till thisreminiscence comforts me Growing in me is the thoughtof yours, Yearning you who heals andcures Our fate keeping us away Uncanny! Turning my days gray
5/31/2019 9:39:54 PM
Missing You- Need Critique	Make me drunk with the jewel of your eyes I want to bloom like cotton and save me from this demise Still you are away from me whole Seems to be lost my heart and soul In one other’s arms you and me, Nostalgia is sweat till this reminiscence comforts me Growing in me is the thought of yours, Yearning you who heals and cures Our fate keeping us away Uncanny! Turning my days gray
6/3/2019 10:09:28 AM
Distance	the construction of the poem is good but it looks like more of a lyrics rather than a poem
7/28/2019 3:35:32 AM
need critique- poem name- missing you	Thank you very much for your valuable comments.
7/28/2019 3:36:07 AM
need critique- poem name- missing you	Thank you very much for your valuable comments
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