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5/28/2010 8:21:40 AM

Justin Street
Posts: 2
I’m what they call
Scourge of the sky
From clouds I fall
Don’t ask why

No matter blood and gore
I am the survivor
Through Carnage I soar
The holy diver

Blazing wings beat
All battles halted
Feeling disapproving heat
Shining light, exalted

Wave of judgment flows
To hell I am your driver
I am your pain and woe
The holy diver

::so what do you think::
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5/28/2010 12:12:52 PM

Dio - Holy Diver. Actually I think this is very nice just the way it is.
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5/29/2010 5:45:28 PM

James Fraser
Posts: 32
Another rock soul, lost to the never ending death gaol. Where in the audience we will be, when it's time for you and thee. We will all become lost "Children of the Sea" lookout!!!!!
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