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3/27/2012 6:49:45 AM

Kara McLain
Posts: 7

Because sometimes
I just feel like a freak.
Because sometimes
You just don’t see me.
Because I’m halfway out of the dark,
And I’m still practicing
Being human.

Because I crave the simplicity,
Yet I thrive in anarchy.
Because I hate when you make me scream,
Yet I love every minute of it.
Because I’m halfway out of the dark,
And I’m still practicing
Being human.

Because your voice
Turns my mind into mental soup.
Because your insanity
Turns mine into nothing.
Because I’m halfway out of the dark,
And I’m still practicing
Being human.

But being human
Might just be the hardest thing.

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