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2/7/2012 3:38:41 PM
James Mahauariki Posts: 1
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fierce, furious, rageful, passive, meek and mild. infuriated, vicious, gentle like a child.
irrationally enraged patient, quiet and calm. murderously violent, kind with open arms.
a rabid livid maniac affectionate and sweet desperate and demented benevolent up beat
awful, brutal, bloodthirsty thoughtful and generous relentless savage wild humane fun boisterous
Nasty evil horrid courteous and cavalier vile Disgusting mean attentive debonair
insane trapped forgotten gallant noble free some of the words that best describe the hypocrisy that's me
James Thomas Mahauariki Copyright © 2010
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2/7/2012 6:15:47 PM
Alex Bruinekool Posts: 1
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A poem of this sort works better in iambic pentameter. This from just doesn't work with the wording. Also, if you're going to use adjective after adjective, make the poem shorter. I found myself wanting to skip to the end to see if there's any real point to it all. Unnecessary words can kill a piece as easily as anything.
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