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8/11/2020 2:16:29 PM Linda Skinner Posts: 4	I have sat alone by a cold lake. My heart-ice. Looking into the deep black hole- no reflection of life or soul. Frozen in time I threw myself in- leaving my hopes and dreams on shore.
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9/17/2020 11:25:01 AM Jack Webster Posts: 255	Many people do use poetry as a cathartic way to express feelings or memories. Remember poems can also be a way to create a vessel to immortalize precious things that feed your soul — it can give them form, a kind of body. Sometimes they can even become like talismans.
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9/19/2020 5:35:04 PM Sally Eslinger Posts: 6	Read this over four times. I have written similarly about falling into a black hole, as in outer space. I felt bad for you, of course, as I read, for you saw yourself as being nothing, feeling as ice...but go back and perhaps you will see more hope than you thought was there, since you wrote at the end of leaving hopes and dreams on shore. So, there were hopes and dreams within you, and as previous comment said, poetry can provide a tLisman not only to your writing, but to yourself. Going to such depth in poetry as you did is indeed painful, but a poet with talent like you have will dig on a bit further to find credit in those hopes and dreams. Live welll. Keep writing! The world needs your full voice!
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10/7/2022 11:36:20 AM Bo Medina Posts: 1	Honestly, personally, I like it. I like how it doesn't end all happy, because LIFE doesn't always end all happy. I also enjoyed your use of facsimile.
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12/19/2022 8:26:58 PM Ms Affection Posts: 9	NICE! it drew me in
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