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2/4/2019 10:20:14 AM
Kiran Nivedh Sarguneswaran
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You are a beautiful song that rings in my heart
You are the beautiful buzz that taps my chest
My whole evening sky with the muse of hue dusk
Only you and me in this world's musk
You are my happiness my eyes search for
You are the shadow of my soul
When we clasp our hands
Little madness starts to play
Our love floats in the air
Isn't this a lovely poem?
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2/10/2019 5:42:21 AM
Jack Webster
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please see my feedback for this poem in the Be Gentle forum. Would love to see it rewritten as a ghazal.
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