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11/18/2018 4:32:35 PM Carolyn Palmer Posts: 1	It takes The first step I sit at home after losing a car On a Sunday no way to church by far You sent a friend who worships elsewhere To gather a load in her car with no fare I am delivered to attend church in the evening To get rid of my hurt My feelings are involved in this; I owe a debt Did you know you helped me? …It takes the first step
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7/22/2019 5:23:15 PM Julia Thomas-Ficken Posts: 17	Load is lacking you...what about something that says & me with no fare You also are rhyming lines"a,b" the 1st & second c,d & then you stopped except for debt and step. Im not up to par on all my forms of poetry so if I am mistaking you improperly please forgive me. I am delivered that night to church, where I go to lose my hurt??? my feelings are involved in this...I am touched? I owe a debt or something about you care or maybe even something about I didnt know you cared...just a suggestion
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