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5/11/2018 2:46:49 AM

vontae harris
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I dream a dream to escape this world to enter a stream of fulfilling hurls, going back and forth I dream a dream of having this everlasting theme, pushing forward in this dream life twist and turn an make me scream, I dream a dream thoughts in my mind confusing me every single time, dancing shadows in my dream i dream a dream of a dream, life gave me this dream to come to past i dream a dream this world at last, having places that are undefined, living this dream I thought was mine, in this dream i dream a dream i know this world is incomplete, I dream a dream of turning time looking for this place I use to call mine, I dream a dream of a place of silence but these demons inside keep realigning, this place at last casting shadows where time wont past this everlasting battle, to give this heart a piece of mind I dream a dream of a future that's mine.

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