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8/15/2011 3:47:18 PM

Lucas Williams
Posts: 10
i didn't write this to be accessible to others only for myself. With that out of the way im open to any critique otherwise

Involute ascendency of an omniscient detriment encased a
crystalline fragility fragmenting. Yearning a periphery absolved
stains the insidious chronicle red. A fading feeling of self
treason is absolute utopia asunder. Subtly i digress yet
paramount is this polarity diverse within me. Caged withing a
translucent spirit my voracious depths untold stagnate abound.
edited by lucslife on 1/23/2012
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