Poetry Forum
12/14/2017 12:37:43 PM
Stephen Wilson-Floyd
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I like the first two stanzas very much. There is some complication there, suggesting a real series of
events. It is always better though to show and not tell. But the third stanza, as the Brits say, "Puts too fine a point on it." Deception is suggested in stanzas one and two. Three just explains what has been suggested. I'd excise stanza three. Best wishes!
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