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What color do you see?

Black :1
Red:0
Other:2
12/8/2017 12:59:14 PM

Riley Hood
Posts: 7
Close your eyes,
Plug your ears,
Hold your breath.
Imagine falling in love with someone.
Imagine a love so alive it burns your lips and scalds your tongue.
Imagine them gone.

Close your eyes,
Plug your ears,
Hold your breath.
Imagine you're a guest in your own mind.
Imagine walking to the darkest corner.
Imagine sliding your back aginst your fears and letting doubt wet your face.

Close your eyes,
Plug your ears,
Hold your breath.

What color do you see?
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12/8/2017 1:00:44 PM

Riley Hood
Posts: 7
if you chose "other" in the poll, please comment what color you imagined!
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12/8/2017 3:13:41 PM

niketa mckenzie
Posts: 4
purple
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12/14/2017 1:07:57 PM

Stephen Wilson-Floyd
Posts: 44
I didn't see any color, but it is a good poetic device to move the poem internally to the reader. This is a difficult poem to write. Love poems are the hardest, lost love, second hardest. I try to say something never said before or at least something said before, said in a different way. With all the love poems and love lost poems, it is nearly impossible. I found it hard to follow the directions in the poem to see the abstract "love". Then it was whisked away. See, darn tough to write a new love lost poem? Best wishes!
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12/17/2017 4:06:34 AM

Gregory R Barden
Posts: 20
I actually SAW purple ... red in the center, one block of baby blue just to the right of the red circle.
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12/30/2017 11:30:37 AM

levi johnson
Posts: 12
I don't see a color either. Asking the reader a question is a way to engage. Yet, I just don't see a point here and its seems less like poetry and more like advertisement. Asking clients questions to engage them is a basic form of marketing. My suggestion is to focus on depth of content. Have a great day
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1/6/2018 12:59:36 PM

Lesa Rodden
Posts: 4
Hi, I think this was a neat poem! I saw a dark brown, almost black color. It may have had something to do with the "dark corner" part of the poem though. I think you have a very interesting mind to think of things like this!
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