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11/25/2017 12:35:13 PM Donald Lee Posts: 5	Everyday i feel so strange Every moment always feels the same Is it fate? Or can i chose to make a change Every night, the same exchange Every time i chose to take the blame It’s all too late. I can never make a change. Am I really so deranged? What if life is really just a game? Is it fate? Or can i chose to make a change? My thoughts never get arranged Bigger pictures never into frame But if i wait I can never make a change. But what if hope is in range? If i tried could peace be mine to claim? Is it fate? Or can i chose to make a change? I cannot remain unchanged I will not stay hidden in my shame I can’t hesitate. I must fight to make the change. But Is it fate? Or can i chose to make a change.
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11/25/2017 12:51:25 PM Stephen Wilson-Floyd Posts: 49	Again, this seems pretty general. How does it feel to feel strange, example please. What is it like (use a metaphor or simile). Not to sound preachy, but I try to write stuff never said before (even if its about silverware, about which I have written) or to say things said before, but said differently. This is pretty common ground about the human condition however intense it feels at the time. Examples, images, nitty-gritty. Let the reader take the journey with you. Best wishes!
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