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For poets who want unrestricted constructive criticism. This is NOT a vanity workshop. If you do not want your poem seriously critiqued, do not post here. Constructive criticism only. PLEASE Only Post One Poem a Day!!!
11/22/2017 1:31:06 PM
Stephen Wilson-Floyd
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Who is your audience here? In my opinion, people write know themselves, communicate with family and friends like greeting cards, or is your audience wider? This is a self-revelatory poem in my opinion. I look for poems that are surprising. There is very little a love poem can say today that hasn't been said before, better. The standard for love poems then is very high. For a wider audience, I would not try rhyme. Anyone can rhyme, few do it well. The problem is the line can never sound like it was included just to finish the rhyme. Each line needs to pull its own weight. Best wishes!
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